Wow, this was my first shot at poetry in... like forever. Hope you like it!

This vast place stretches before me;
The billions of sand grains,
send me into a sentimental awe.
 
The creature below me,
so powerful,
so beautiful,
so humble,
this respectful horse.
 
This beach,
this time,
this feeling,
this horse,
is all mine.
 
The sand kicks up,
trying to tear through the
denim of my pants.
The dogs chase the horses,
desperately trying to keep up;
but they are slower than snails
racing cats.
The fuming leather reins,
furiously dig into my skin.
The horse’s velvety mane,
lighter than a down feather.
 
The intense surf on the beach,
crashes down with a mighty “boom”!
Every time the horse beats down
with another rhythmic stride,
I can hear his even breathing.
The strike of his hooves on the sand,
is so cadenced that it almost sounds robotic.
 
The salty sea air tang,
lingers in m mouth.
 
As the gorgeous horse beneath me,
begins to sweat,
its beautiful fragrance rises.
The powerful aroma,
of the strong salty sea ear,
is amazingly blissful.
 
This orchestra of moments
eternally remain.
Even if they say that nothing ceaselessly lasts,
I know these memories
Will forever stay with me.


Submitted: March 26, 2009

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Kassidy

You use your senses well in this piece:

The "boom" of the surf, the feel of the sand, the smell of the sweat and sea.... Props :)

Sun, April 5th, 2009 8:53am

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Thanks so much! =]

Sun, April 5th, 2009 2:16am

catch22

Excellent piece..i love it...i used to be a horse rider,never rode on the beach though.thanks for sharing.

--chuck

Mon, April 6th, 2009 12:55pm

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Your welcome! And thx for the comment! =]

Mon, April 6th, 2009 6:25am

narvaezsymon

WOW................

THIS IS GREAT...........

BEAUTIFUL..............

Mon, April 6th, 2009 1:13pm

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Thanks! I haven't tried much poetry since my computer completly died, deleting all of my past poetry! Thx again! =]

Mon, April 6th, 2009 6:30am

narvaezsymon

THE TITLE TOTALLY SUITS THE POEM.........

Mon, April 6th, 2009 1:14pm

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Wow thanks! =] I'm really bad at choosing stuff let alone choosing names! lol. Thx! =]

Mon, April 6th, 2009 6:28am

hawtchica007

I love it!!!!

Tue, April 7th, 2009 4:24pm

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thx! =]

Tue, April 7th, 2009 4:22pm

AoenRoxx

this is a really beautiful poem!
it describes the beauty of the horse. i like this line:

"This orchestra of moments
eternally remain.
Even if they say that nothing ceaselessly lasts,
I know these memories
Will forever stay with me."

very nice ending to a poem. i love it! :D

Sat, April 11th, 2009 3:44am

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thx! =D

Sat, April 11th, 2009 2:00am

burnedsoul

This was great Katie! This is Galih not Katya lol. Hows Tembag?

Fri, May 22nd, 2009 6:13am

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thx! (:
lol yeh... aah tembag is tembag... boring :P

Sat, May 23rd, 2009 8:11am

Brian W

WOW what a truely remarkable poem I could picture you racing along the beach as I read this. Great flow and well written

Wed, July 1st, 2009 12:42am

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thanks a heap!! :D

Wed, July 1st, 2009 9:30pm

poet soldier

What a poem! really makes me feel like I am there myself and reminds me of when I learned how to ride but I never got the chance to ride up the beach with the dogs running after. The picture of a perfect life. Thank you.
Alex

Fri, July 3rd, 2009 7:46am

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It's a moment you really wanna stay in... thank you (:

Fri, July 3rd, 2009 9:50am

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