What happens when just being together isn't enough?

You asked me once,
If I could let you go.
And I said yes.
Hoping you would come back,
Because I made myself,
Into the perfect woman for you.
 
I shaved away little pieces of myself,
So I could fit into your arms.
And now I'm left with this stranger,
Who is me.
But I hardly know myself at all.
 
I gave you my poetry,
And I'm left with nothing,
No words in my head.
Nothing to describe what we shared.
And I go to bed every night,
With this stranger.
This wordless, hopeless stranger,
Who is me,
And I don't know her at all.


Submitted: July 02, 2009

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Brian W

Always be yourself and be accepted for who you are donot change for others only change for yourself. Another good poem that gets the reader thinking. I felt this was a sad poem. Well written

Sat, July 4th, 2009 12:31pm

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thanks for the nice words! its good that something can come out of the sadness.

Sun, July 5th, 2009 2:41am

TDahl94

After my first and worst heartbreak I felt very similar to what this poem describes...I started to try and be who I was before that relationship and came to find out that not only could I not remember how to act, I couldn't remember who I was, or what i was. Losing yourself is a truly scary thought and I was scared out of my mind and began to franticly search for myself...but I turned to substance abuse and got addicted to things that the real me had sworn to never try and finnaly after all is said and done...I finally refound myself, though it took almost 6 months...I really hope that you dont have to go threw that but if you do then feel free to talk to me...I understand whats goin on...and maybe I can help..

Thu, July 9th, 2009 4:05pm

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aww thanks! i feel like writing has helped me get through all the hard times ive had, and this one was no different... im glad you found yourself again. that is the worst part

Thu, July 9th, 2009 9:31am

RaisinGirl

wow. this is amazing. I have definitely been there....and I really love the emotion and the twist in the ending lines....I've known loneliness for a long time, too long...till now. I'll be married in less than 48 hrs ;D lol. well, I liked this piece a lot. You will find your other half. but let kind love find you, don't look too hard for it. *m*

Thu, July 23rd, 2009 7:05am

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what great advice! congrats on the upcoming nuptials!!

Thu, July 23rd, 2009 8:26am

shewhowrites21

this was great! :D
it definitely had deep emotion in it.
it made me feel sad, yet realize that i should just be myself through anything, and change for nobody.
i loved it. it was amazing!

Thu, November 19th, 2009 4:24am

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thank you so much! what kind feedback!

Wed, November 18th, 2009 9:38pm

purplecow919

Awesome job, Amanda! Your voice truly came through in this poetic journey. GReat job, and I totally loved it (obviously)!!! :) :)

Sun, November 22nd, 2009 12:27pm

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thank you!!!!!!!!! you are so kind!

Sun, November 22nd, 2009 10:06am

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