And through the night

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its for the poetry fator compitition! i edited it to make it less lines, but i couldnt make it 15 lines, its still more, im sorry, but i hope that this at least helped a bit

walking, walking,around in circles,

no words, no people,just silence.

tomorrow willl beidentical,

today there are clouds,

tomorrow the same,

nothing is worth it,nothing is,

tomorrow,it wont matter,

if you have fallen today,

you will on the ground tomorrow,

if you dont,it wont matter,

going throught this,so many times,

tomorrow will come,

and it wont matter,

tomorrow will come,at midnight,

so soon, so soon,

yet it takes along time,

let it go, let it pass,

but no,just stay,just like this,

all through the night.

Submitted: September 24, 2011

Poetry night tomorrow fallen silence clouds worth midnight

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Christian Taylor

This is christian; one of the judges of the competition....

I thought the poem was great and I felt the emotions that into this poem, which is one of the important factors of this competition.

However, a poem cannot exceed 15 lines in this competition and your poem 29 lines long. But great effort and good luck in this contest. - CT

Sat, September 24th, 2011 11:26pm

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:) i understand, thx :))

Thu, November 17th, 2011 12:32pm

glitter snow426

wow, super cool!! Truly love this glowing, special poem. GREAT, UNFORGETTABLE!

Sat, September 24th, 2011 11:38pm

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:) thank you soo much :)

Thu, November 17th, 2011 12:32pm

Flames of Night

This is Aly, andother judge.
why your poem was great, christian is correct, you exceeded the 15 line rule.
but on a possitive note...i liked it a lot. every line was short and simply, and yet i could feel the emotion.
good luck!

Thu, September 29th, 2011 1:48am

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:) thank you!

Thu, November 17th, 2011 12:31pm