This is a humour poem that I am entering for the humour or sad contest. About a packet of chips

Laying down on the sweet green grass

Right next to my curly lass

Not caring about the time of day

Or whether the stars have come out to play

What I do know is that my hunger is great

My quest is for Walmart, it's always open late

With my ninja skills from panda express

My task becomes harder less and less

With every sensation heightened to it's fullest

I walk with ease because I am the coolest

I pass some brownies and let out a hardy laugh

Those aren't for now, I've already had that

My body craves salt,but not baritos

I have sighted my prize, nacho cheese doritos

I held them in my arms tenderly and sweetly

They look at me and smile weakly

I've failed my mission and I scream aloud NO

My mind is overtaken with sadness and woe

In anger I rip and tear at her flesh

Begin to eat her insides and make a mess

My world is gone,I am no longer free

And to think this all started because of a tree


Submitted: November 25, 2013

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Jonathan DeLacuso

Wow. This was funny and sad. But overall it was very interesting though I said Wtf at some parts. I dp hope you. win and I wish you the best of luck.

Mon, November 25th, 2013 9:52am

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I thank you very much...I know this was a weird one lol. Glad you liked it :)

Mon, November 25th, 2013 1:57am

Kenisha Liyanage

It was great with rhyming couplets. Some parts are really funny and some were sad and I got confused sometimes but it's just old me who gets confused most of the time.

Mon, November 25th, 2013 2:38pm

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Thank you very much :) it's ok I think this poem of mine was a bit hard to follow at times for some people ;)

Mon, November 25th, 2013 8:59pm

Read Aloud

This is really funny but at some parts I was like "TF?" or "WTF?" and "Lawl."

Mon, November 25th, 2013 3:55pm

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Thank you very much...I hope that it was a good thing atleast :)

Mon, November 25th, 2013 8:57pm

city-lights

An amazing and very unique poem. You've got the humor written in the right places and also the sadness. The rhyming is perfect. You have great talent at poetry!! :)

Mon, November 25th, 2013 6:55pm

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Thank you very much. Your comment means alot :)

Mon, November 25th, 2013 8:57pm

Raquelita15

Hahaha I loved this :)

Tue, November 26th, 2013 12:41am

Raquelita15

Hahaha I loved this :)

Tue, November 26th, 2013 12:41am

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Thank you...I am glad you liked it :)

Mon, November 25th, 2013 8:55pm

bobthebuilder

Quirky and random, but entertaining!

Tue, November 26th, 2013 2:22am

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Thank you :)

Mon, November 25th, 2013 8:55pm

panda window

bit different but thats what makes it great! also you metioned the word Panda which makes me SUPER HAPPY. great poem!

Tue, November 26th, 2013 1:46pm

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:) Thank you very much, I am glad that you liked it :)

Tue, November 26th, 2013 5:53am

FunWriting

Sorry just getting to my requests but... - Very different from other poems I've read on this which isn't bad at all :D I agree with everyone else when I say this made me laugh a bit and I don't usually laugh when I read poems, it made it unique in some way to me xD Good work!! :)

Wed, November 27th, 2013 6:53pm

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Thank you very much, I am glad that it made you laugh, then I know that I did my job correcly hwen writing this piece. Thank you for the comment :)

Wed, November 27th, 2013 9:55pm

Blake Star

This is rlly good. I like ur imagery and description, and u hv a signature style of writing poems that just makes it greater keep it up :D

Wed, November 27th, 2013 11:07pm

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Thank you very much :)

Wed, November 27th, 2013 9:51pm

Sarahh365

Haha this was funny. Good rhyme scheme! A little weird at times, but eh, that's alright. Thanks for the request, good work!

Sat, November 30th, 2013 2:53am

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Thank you very much adn thank you for taking the time to read it and I am glad that you liked it :)

Sun, December 1st, 2013 9:54pm

Midnight Amethyst

Yay! Loved it, made me chuckle - a little confused in one spot but the ending was great!

Tue, December 3rd, 2013 11:15am

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Thank you very much, I am glad that you liked it :)

Tue, December 3rd, 2013 3:21am

stranger in the corner

amazing and unique, always a pleasure to see what comes from your pen!

Tue, February 4th, 2014 1:22am

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Thank you very much and thank you for your comment, you are always getting the bigger picture of my poems thank you for that :)

Mon, February 3rd, 2014 9:40pm

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