HUNG UP! ( Gadzookiie Spice99 poetry Quizzy )

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Revenge is such a powerful phrase.. When jealousy takes over your mind and you become a woman scorned. Who knows what you will say or do?
( Submission to Gadzookiie Spice 99s Poetry Quizzy )

HUNG UP!

(Submission to Gadzookiie Spice 99sQuizzy challenge)

I'll get you back just wait and see

you wont get away with what you did to me

I know you are jealous and you want my man

but he is my boyfriend not yours my friend

If you want a fight well bring it on

you know where I live dont take too long

I punch the wall deciding your fate

my boyfriend just called he said he'd be late

I stare at the clock he has'nt arrived

whats taking so long it's a ten minute drive

I call his cell he presses ignore

I`m mad as hell hes with that whore

I jump in my car and drive to her house

grabbing their waterhose quiet as a mouse

I opened her door and aimed the hose like a gun

thats what you do when two bitches are hung

Angellynn

Submitted: March 17, 2009

Humor fight boyfriend revenge waterhose

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dehrman

Wow! Very scary, Angelynn. I wouldn't mess with you....Course, I don't think we'd be after the same thing lol.

- Dan

Tue, March 17th, 2009 1:54am

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Watch out for them water hoses. I hear they bite like a snake.

Lol! Thanks Dan!

Angellynn :)

Mon, March 16th, 2009 6:57pm

Gadzookziie Spice 99

Wow!
In reply to Bailey you will do well :) Great, i loved it! Write more for the sake of it.... maybe i'll become a devoted fan too!
Good luck - thankies also x x :)

Danni Spice

Tue, March 17th, 2009 7:24am

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Thank you Danni.I'm glad you liked It. I was'nt sure if my plot was good enough.. But I guess it was.. Lol!

Thanks again!

Angellynn :)

Tue, March 17th, 2009 5:15am

rustyfootprints88

i liked that alot very well put out for a fire woman.....10/10

Tue, March 17th, 2009 7:52am

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Lol thats funny!
Thanks rustyfootprints..
glad you liked it!

Angellynn :)

Tue, March 17th, 2009 5:17am

Manyfacets

This is hilarious Angelynne! (laughing)
Your effort here is fantastic! Love it!
It's a winner! Kind regards M.

Tue, March 17th, 2009 1:07pm

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Thank you Brenda. I`m really getting into these challenges and when theres one on poetry.. I just cant pass it up. I picked the letter R and was given Revenge as the subject..It was hard for me because I`m not really good with revenge type subjects.. So I thought back to one of my old boyfriends who did me wrong and went from there...

Thanks again my friend!

Angellynn :)

Tue, March 17th, 2009 6:21am

Night Write

MEOW! Do you promise? I loved the dark edged tone to this piece...I found it quite refreshing cause the Night Write was running on empty and you just filled up my tank...Good Write Angellynn!

Thu, March 19th, 2009 12:27pm

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Thanks NightWrite! I truly appreciate that coming from such an artiiiiiiiiiiiist... Hee Hee !

Angellynn :)

Thu, March 19th, 2009 5:43am

Gentlespirit

Night write is quite right ...... you conveyed some dark venom throughout this piece which was a rivetting read - I loved the pacey revenge theme of your piece, spiced with it humourous touches!

Brilliant! Good luck in the challenge :0)

Fri, March 20th, 2009 2:56pm

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Thank you Vee!
I truly appreciate your wonderful comments.

Angellynn :)

Fri, March 20th, 2009 8:39am