So stay…Baby
Submitted: January 29, 2009
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This is very good and is my favourite out of your work well done
Sun, February 1st, 2009 9:30pm
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Wow, thank you! ^^ I'm so glad you enjoyed it!
Tue, February 3rd, 2009 4:41am
AngelTears48
I am an amature singer songwriter and I think this is really good. I would recomend changing: "With you I’ll never give up hope - Without you I don’t think I can cope" To:
With you I keep on coping
With you I go on hoping
This changes the lines to positive (Instead of revese negative) "ing" also rings better lyrically than "ope" at the ends of the lines. I also flipped the lines because hoping is more powerful than coping.
Great Song
Tim
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That's a god idea! Thanks!
Sat, February 7th, 2009 6:33am
Good job!!!
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EdwardJBradleySr
AngelTears48:
Thu, January 29th, 2009 2:39pmWell written and presented. Could, easily, be put to music. Good rhyme and rhythm.
Gave it an "I Like It" vote.
Happy trails,
Ed Bradley.
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Thank you so much! It was really strange, I wrote this when I couldn't fall asleep on a piece of scrap paper. Then, I thought it sounded pretty good and I posted it on Booksie!
Thu, January 29th, 2009 2:06pm