best friends until the end

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

about 2 best friends

Best friends

 

The first day we met feels so long ago,

When we were so young and naive

In primary three you joined Meethill,

You were like a shiny new toy being brought to life.

During break you were surrounded,

All the girls wanted to know who you were.

I could hardly get a word in to speak,

So I told you were the toilets were

And you laughed at me.

I felt embarrassed, I felt so ashamed,

I wanted to blush and run away.

Many years later we are best friends,

Guiding each other through life and all of it's bends.

There's so much about each other that we understand,

We held so much emotion inside.

I hold a love for you like I do a sister,

Always there for one another.


Submitted: June 09, 2013

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mintcherryful

this is so cute! i really like it :) well done x

Thu, July 25th, 2013 8:45pm

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thanks :)

Thu, July 25th, 2013 4:15pm

Lona333

This is a beautiful poem. It really explains how best friends are, act, and feel. Great job. -Eli

Thu, August 1st, 2013 8:29pm

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Thank you so much :)

Thu, August 1st, 2013 2:33pm

Yasmina S Lasker

Really nice and emotional poem! Well done!

Thu, August 22nd, 2013 5:58am

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Thank you

Thu, August 22nd, 2013 8:21am

Lisa Ayers

Well done, shows the special bond between friends.

Sun, September 1st, 2013 12:30am

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Thank you so much i definitely agree. :)~anniebirnie~:)

Sun, September 1st, 2013 5:46am

Mikey CD

best friends, one of God's greatest gifts. nice poem! :D

Fri, September 6th, 2013 5:07am

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Aww thank you, i totally agree. Thanks for the comment :)~anniebirnie~:)

Fri, September 6th, 2013 8:23am

Archia

That was really sweet. Just one thing, singular 'i' should be a capital 'I'. But the content of this is really sweet, and I think it really shows that bond between two best friends and how it can survive.

Mon, November 4th, 2013 11:40am

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Thank you, I appreciate this very sweet comment. I am glad you liked it. :)~anniebirnie~:)

Mon, November 4th, 2013 8:52am

39strypes

Beautifully written, I like it.

Wed, November 13th, 2013 5:42am

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Thank you, I appreciate the comment, I am glad you like it :)~anniebirnie~:)

Wed, November 13th, 2013 6:35am

Poetlife

As you asked me to comment on your work here goes,;-

If you read my profile I say I don't read or leave comments on any other type of writing. ONLY POETRY.
Usually.If I feel it worth while.
I agree with Archia's comment.

You need to learn grammar and use a dictionary.

I feel many will relate to your work, as most good friends ,are just that 'Good friends'.

To me poetry is a painting in words, feelings, shades of light and shade- take the reader on a journey.

I read a great deal- I suggest you do so too?
Good luck.

Fri, November 15th, 2013 1:38am

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Thank you for the honist comment, I shall take it in :)~anniebirnie~:)

Fri, November 15th, 2013 10:46am

Poetlife

& dark,try putting your reader into the work, sweeping them along with your flow-Keep them guessing what comes next.

Fri, November 15th, 2013 1:42am

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Thank you, I shall certainly do that. :)~anniebirnie~:)

Fri, November 15th, 2013 10:44am

KodamaKiss

this is really cute I wish I could have a best friend like that, however I thought the way u ended it was a bit weird but overall a really good job

Thu, June 26th, 2014 4:18am

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Thank you, you may be lucky soon. :)

Wed, June 25th, 2014 11:04pm

SuzanneE

Okay, first I want to say that I am returning the favour to all of the people who have read and commented on Beating The Player as a thanks. This includes you (: So, I will be reading at least two of your works for now and will eventually end up reading all of them and giving some long comments and feedback. It's my way of showing how much you all mean to me.
Secondly: Awe, this is a cute poem! It's short but you've captured the relationship of two best friends quite well. Nothing is perfect and I like that you point that out. There's a few small grammatical mistakes, but nothing major. Good job, I'll be back to read more later. -Suz

Thu, August 21st, 2014 3:50pm

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Thank you, I am glad that you enjoyed it, :)~Anniebirnie~:)

Mon, August 25th, 2014 9:16am

Tom Allen714

A very sweet poem...Tom...

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