i walk in the rain

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

this is my first poem I posted on this site. its simply about how when you walk in the rain, no one can tell your crying.

i walk in the rain

i stroll under the stars

the rain falls down

my tears become one

with the droplets

falling from the heaven

my barefeet pound the sand

the waves pound the shore

my heart pounds my chest

i take a ragged breath

i stumble

i falter

my heart raw and ripped

my eyes red

my soul stripped

i walk until the sun

is rising in the sky

i walk in the rain

so no one can see me cry


Submitted: December 21, 2008

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DomXD

This was amazing
So sad.
Yet very well written

xxx
Dominique

Tue, December 23rd, 2008 4:43pm

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..... thanks!!! :)

Tue, December 23rd, 2008 9:18am

CrossMyHeartAndHopeToDie

Another very good poem I like them keep it up =)

Tue, December 23rd, 2008 11:38pm

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thanks!!! i'll try, lol

Tue, December 23rd, 2008 8:46pm

Love Can Make Or Break You

I really like this poem. It makes a lot of sense but its also really well written.

Wed, December 24th, 2008 12:41am

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thank you, i really loved this one too, :)

Tue, December 23rd, 2008 8:45pm

guff01

you had good flow in this and it has easy readability. I like including weather elements in my stuff too

Wed, December 24th, 2008 8:06pm

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thanks :)
ya, i like relating or adding nature-like ideas to my writing (weather, sunsets, mountains, etc)

Thu, December 25th, 2008 7:54am

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