My Pain by Antonio Westley "A Dedication"

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This poem is a dedication to someone close to me who is going through a rough time right now and i couldn't help but try and express her feelings with a cry of literature, which i know we all want to do when we have been through too much in our lives. This is her mountain and my understanding so i call out to my fans to please join in with helpful comments so we can let her know that everything will be okay. Ty

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Submitted: March 09, 2013

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Lisa Ayers

Pain well expressed. Words flowed nicely.
Relatable to so many people.

Hoping your friend finds comfort soon.

Sat, March 9th, 2013 6:31pm

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I hope so as well thank you for being considerate enough to take a glance and share that with us all ;)

Sat, March 9th, 2013 11:18pm

ValeriyaPonomar

I LOVED IT! I have no words to describe this amazing poem. You spoke of sadness and grief and pain so well here! Many who take upon themselves to do such a thing end up ruining the poem but yours was perfect.
It flowed nicely as well.
And I hope your friend reads this and knows what a wonderful friend you are to them because this is heart wrenching yet so beautiful!
Gets a like from me!
:)

Sat, March 9th, 2013 8:46pm

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Wow Valeriya that means alot coming from a writer of your caliber. Than you for sharing that with me it truly made my day and i hope when she reads these comments it will touch her as well :)

Sat, March 9th, 2013 11:16pm

Tatia22

Wow, amazing! So relatable and true. You always choose such good topics and make them into a wonderful piece.Although, I'll be honest, I personally thought the 3rd and 4th lines were a little off, but maybe because you were trying to rhyme.

As I read more, I fell in love with the flow of the poem. And It's really nice of you to care about someone like that. Hope everything gets better for your friend! Thanks for sharing.

Sat, March 9th, 2013 9:08pm

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Thank you for your consideration Tatia you are kind for sharing :)

Sat, March 9th, 2013 11:14pm

Richmaggs

Really nicely presented and heartfelt words. A very enjoyable read although quite sad. You are a talented poet my friend!

Sun, March 10th, 2013 6:09pm

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Thank you for the compliment Richmaggs i appreciate it :)

Tue, March 12th, 2013 5:37am

Passion123

Oh, it's heart-wrenching to know someone is actually going through this. Tell her to try and stay positive, which is hard when you're going through this amount of pain. She's lucky to have a friend that cares this much, so tell her to keep around people who truly care about her like you seem to.

This poem is lovely and obviously sad, but I can relate to it and it's easy to follow.

I think you did a good job at portraying the strong emotions (that isn't easy to do). And I applaud you for writing this.


Have a lovely day.

Sun, March 10th, 2013 10:03pm

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I know its never easy to know someone close to you is hurting but all we can do is stick by them and remind them of their true worth and hope that they can see it too. Thank you for sharing passion123 -,-

Tue, March 12th, 2013 5:39am

scully23

wow you got me hooked on the first sentence .. this is really good, and it describes it soo well
i liked it .. and i wish she didnt have to go through anymore pain especially the way you described it

Mon, March 11th, 2013 11:29pm

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I feel the same Scully23 but as time recedes so will the pain. Ty for sharing :)

Tue, March 12th, 2013 5:36am

AntonioWestley

*UPDATE*

It seems the heartbroken lady i wrote this poem for decided it was best to become blinded by her own anger and fall into the dark abyss of what it is like to become a man hater. Me and her don't even speak anymore despite my efforts to help her get over her pain. She was ungrateful and had lost some one close to her simply because she felt the need to be selfish at all costs.

So i bid her fare well simply because i don't have time for people who don't honor to their word and cherish their loved ones.

- Antonio Westley

Fri, April 5th, 2013 5:18pm

Nruiz

I always appreciated this poem. I came back to it because I wanted to read it again only to see that you have **updated** your fans by bashing the hell out of me. But let me just go back into my dark, ungrateful, selfish abyss of man-hating.

Mon, July 1st, 2013 7:55am

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I'm sorry you feel that way Nruiz but that was posted a long time ago when i was feeling spiteful. You should know very well that time heals all wounds and it was different time then. I am happy with someone else now the way you preferred -_,-

Tue, July 2nd, 2013 9:16am

Criss Sole

I could really relate to this. I thought it was very sweet, what you tried to do and was a little upset that there was drama between you two.

Tue, July 2nd, 2013 12:24pm

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Truthfully Criss i was saddened that things went the way they did and felt spiteful like anyone else would if they went through that. It was like loosing a piece of myself at the time but i only want the best for people at the end of the day. I never want to be were i am not wanted and no one should and if that is what made her happy then so be it. Can't fight a losing battle right -_,-

Tue, July 2nd, 2013 9:12am

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