Our Garden

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

An Entry into the Poetry Competition for November

Our Garden

By: Joe Attanasio

 

 

We placed a trellis in our yard,

To make a garden all our own.

A place to write our poetry.

A dream shared, heart to heart.

 

Ivy climbed the trellis,

Flowers grew and blossomed.

Together on the hidden bench.

We scribbled out our prose.

 

As light faded at dusk,

Eyes forced to leave the pages.

Glancing each other, darkness falling

Creativity transformed to lust.

 

 

 


Submitted: November 08, 2011

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glitter snow426

oh very sweet, wonderfully done!! this certainly touched my heart, warm and sincere! GREAT, TRULY SPECIAL, LOVELY! Good luck, I have mine up too, Always Roses, Always Music. be in touch, Vincey

Tue, November 8th, 2011 3:14pm

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Hi again, I always love crossing words with you. I will certainly read yours! I love your writing!

Tue, November 8th, 2011 8:41am

bobthebuilder

Nice. This is so random, but made me think of the cialis commercials, "when the time is right"... hey, you don't have two bathtubs out there do you?

Wed, November 9th, 2011 4:11am

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Your a funny guy with a strange dry sense of humor. Exactly the kind I prefer!! I love your comment.

Thanks for the read and comment.

Wed, November 9th, 2011 4:03am

dibbledabble

Nice, an idyllic day explained with apparent simplicity, but so cleverly. I wish you many idyllic days.

Thu, November 10th, 2011 10:25pm

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I appreciate the comment. You know about the poetry competition right? Christian Taylor puts it on, he gives everyone the same 5 words (dream, lust, garden, dusk, and poetry) and you 8-15 lines to make a poem using only each word only once and no more then 1 word on a line.

You should see his page and enter! it is great fun! you have untill 11/22 or 80 people have entered.

Thu, November 10th, 2011 3:53pm

Honeysuckle1310

it is so awesome! Pls read my poem "The death of our poetry garden". Thanks so much!

Fri, November 11th, 2011 9:40am

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I am on my way to read it now!

Thanks for your comment.

Fri, November 11th, 2011 4:34am

Teach

This is awesome, beautifully put together....

Sat, November 12th, 2011 10:08pm

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Thank you kind sir, very much.

I appreciate the read!

Sat, November 12th, 2011 4:26pm

fresh spirits

I must wish you a nice luck in this awesome comp.I am in with poem titled by Eternal Magic.Hope to see it as good as yours:)

Tue, November 15th, 2011 11:16am

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Well, I thank you very much for the warm wishes. There are some great poems coming out of this competition! I love it.

I will check your out if i missed it! I skip around so much, I am not sure who I read but your name is certainly everywhere!

Tue, November 15th, 2011 3:52am

Rajan Thapaliya

very nice

Wed, November 16th, 2011 2:54am

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Thank you for your kind comment!

I appreciate it so much!

Wed, November 16th, 2011 7:46am

Christian Taylor

With my part in the judging now done, I get the chance to look around and see what the other poetry entries look like...

This poem is very well-written and your lines are perfect! Great use of words and excellent use of making this poem have an emotional punch! Good job and good luck!

- Christian Taylor

Sun, November 27th, 2011 6:00pm

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Thanks so much, No matter what happens in the contest, I want to personally thank you for organizing such an event. It is great fun for all involved.

Sun, November 27th, 2011 11:40am

Flames of Night

wow. this is great! loved your use of words.
good luck!

Mon, November 28th, 2011 7:35pm

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Thanks for the encouraging comment. It is always nice to be genuinely appreciated.

Mon, November 28th, 2011 12:46pm

sherry1

Catching up on reading and so glad I found this one. Lovely thought process. :) Sherry

Mon, December 5th, 2011 6:43am

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Thanks again for following my writing! I enjoy sharing with you!

Mon, December 5th, 2011 10:00am

Wilbur

The beach does have the power to do that! Nice write.

Best regards, Wilbur

Sat, December 10th, 2011 9:11pm

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Thanks for the comment. I deleted the blank one.

I appreciate you taking the time to read me!

Sat, December 10th, 2011 1:14pm

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