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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

Second poem intended to be more 'humorous' but also more fluent.

You could say that you were just like a flower,

You have beauty,

And it grows by the hour,

And you're not like the types that are completely moody,

But you are rather kind,

And when people stare,

You do not mind,

And you do not care,

But what happens in winter?

The flower withers,

And the pedals go thither,

And the leaves go hither,

But what about yourself?

Can you say the same?

Is your beauty stored lamely upon the shelf?

And must your hideusness be tamed?

There are too many problems when comparing beauty to a flower,

For we do not want it to wither.

Submitted: March 31, 2012

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This is so eloquent and thoughtful. I love it! :)

Sat, March 31st, 2012 2:50pm


Thank you. First time commenting on my poetry thanks a lot.

Sat, March 31st, 2012 2:17pm


well written poem, i love it so ;)

Sat, March 31st, 2012 3:24pm


Thanks for the comment. It's my second comment on it, I'm glad you enjoy it.

Sat, March 31st, 2012 2:25pm


Awwe honey I love this :)! Very well written. And you're only ten?!? My younger sister is ten and she could never write something like this. You are old beyond your years, darling! What a great quality to have. I love it! :)

Sun, April 1st, 2012 8:34pm


Thank you so much! I think that if she really tried, your sister could write well. But thanks so much for the comment.

Sun, April 1st, 2012 1:39pm

Christian Taylor

Another excellent poem! I really enjoyed this one as well! Instant fan!

Sun, April 1st, 2012 9:41pm


Really? Oh thank you, thank you, thank you soooo much!!!

Sun, April 1st, 2012 3:16pm

Lexie M

beautiful girly! :)

Mon, April 2nd, 2012 1:46am


Awww, thanks, you're really too kind. Thanks again for becoming a fan I'm really grateful!

Sun, April 1st, 2012 6:50pm


Wonderful! :)

Wed, April 4th, 2012 12:39am


Thanks, again.

Tue, April 3rd, 2012 5:40pm


you've got control of poetry. spare and thought out. well chosen words. i especially liked your triple rhyme, whithers, thither, and hither. that was fun.

Wed, April 4th, 2012 8:51am


Thanks. I got the hither and thither part from reading so much of Grimm's fairytales :]

Wed, April 4th, 2012 4:43am


Woww again w0w, are u realy 10??:P
amazing p0etry br0, ah_ma,Zzing.. Its realy nice that u're s0 th0ughtful, nd it fl0wed beautifuly...:)
greatly d0ne!
Kmu if u write m0re.:)
stay blessd~

Wed, April 4th, 2012 7:52pm


yeah, of course I'll kyu [y is you] I wouldn't say I'm blessed really, though... But I'm glad you think so!!! :p

Wed, April 4th, 2012 12:56pm


wow again.. you really have a talent.. :)

Fri, April 6th, 2012 7:44am


thanks. I love writing soooo much :]

Fri, April 6th, 2012 7:09am


Well, you seem to have quite a few fans and many positive comments, but let's make one more, shall we? First off, wonderful poem! I really loved it. You remind me of myself when I was eleven... *flash back* well actually, you're much better. Can't wait to read more of your work. :P

Sun, April 8th, 2012 8:55pm


lol- I wrote this when I was ten, though, and I'm glad you think so. And thanks a lot for the comment :]

Sun, April 8th, 2012 2:54pm

Ian Dawn

Nice job yet again this is so well written but more on it was well thought out your mind is a narative to your soul and yours is coloured with tallent.

Mon, April 9th, 2012 11:23pm


Wow, I love your description of my poem, very good vocabulary :P

Mon, April 9th, 2012 6:06pm


This is cute-I like how beautifully written the words are. Great job!
With all due respect, Deathstix.

Mon, April 23rd, 2012 1:05am


Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it :]

Mon, April 23rd, 2012 4:08pm

Yume chan

Hey there^^ awesome poem! I love it so much. Reminds me of the one chapter I wrote on Silent Kishi about a flower and how Kurai is being compared to a flower. Really a nice poem that has one thinking how God created all unique^^

Tue, May 1st, 2012 1:22pm


haha i'll be reading the chapter soon if I haven't alrady read it and I just can't put my finger on it :]

Tue, May 1st, 2012 2:23pm


Ummm...I feel like a flower now...XD

Sat, June 16th, 2012 3:24pm


:P good luck when bees are stinging you to death

Sat, June 16th, 2012 8:57am


what a truly beautiful and wonderful poem its really good xxx

Sun, June 17th, 2012 8:24pm


thanks :P

Sun, June 17th, 2012 1:28pm


Typo: hideusness should be hideousness

Human beauty and plant beauty are so much alike. Even after both wither in the cold (for humans metaphorical cold) winds of time, what matters is that the roots remain alive and the buds survive the frost for the next Spring.

Even humans can "bloom" more than once like flowers, though in different and more unique ways.

Mon, June 18th, 2012 6:56am


Yes, but the dormant thing is not the same as a flower- flowers are a lot better looking :]

Wed, June 20th, 2012 12:40pm

declan mckimm

You are such a talented poet! I find it hard to believe you're only 11!

Sun, June 24th, 2012 6:46pm


Thanks. I like to think I'm good at writing but there's always room for improvement...

Sun, June 24th, 2012 12:31pm

Stormbird Throneshaker

This is majesticaly magnificent!

Fri, July 6th, 2012 3:46am


hehe nice description and thanks.

Fri, July 6th, 2012 10:14am

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