a short poem inspired by a recent event. dedicated to my 3 "friends"! note the " ". and they probably won't read this. (p.s. tetsuni and louis, i'm not talking about you here, lol) special shortout to ONE of them: since you like the F*** word so much, go F*** yourself!! lol.

I learnt that
Friendship is meant to be perished, not cherished.
 
I learnt that
Friends are to be treated with vulgarities, not respect.
 
I learnt that
Friends have to be perfect, if not you’ll just get ignored.
 
With what I’ve learnt,
I’ll move on, and I thank you.
 
I thank you.


Submitted: November 25, 2009

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Behold

Uh, okay. lol. Sorry but uh, this isn't all that great. Not gonna lie, it's pretty short and doesn't rhyme much, but I get the message. There's certainly room for improvement. :O

Wed, November 25th, 2009 7:46am

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okay!
thank god i'm not very much into poetry is it? =]
anyway, my point is to insult the person who sent me a LONG MESSAGE (which can be counted as 9 messages) INSULTING ME WITH VULGARITIES.
lol.
anyway, thanks for reading! :D

Wed, November 25th, 2009 12:32am

dontloveme

haha it may not be awesome poetry but i get how you feel
my god i got the same thign going on with backstabbers and whatnot, ugh
lol but it's good to write about things you feel :)

Thu, November 26th, 2009 6:12am

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haha, i know it's not exactly good after i re-read it.
anyway, thanks for reading! :D
thanks for that extra moral support too!
and it's kind of resolved already. lol.

Thu, November 26th, 2009 1:23am

DuskAndDestiny

Not bad, but you spelled "learned" wrong. It's either spelled "learned" (past tense) or "have learnt" (past participle). :)

PS--"I've" is a contraction of "I have", so not all of these need to be fixed.

Otherwise, a decent poem.

Sun, November 29th, 2009 2:38pm

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wow, thanks for reading! :D
and i wasn't really thinking when i wrote it. my anger got the better of me. lol. XD

Sun, November 29th, 2009 5:16pm

PaulChafer

ct has it right August, they are beneath you: you can dress pigs in clothes, but you cannot stop them from grunting. We all get hassle from those who wish to to belittle us and make us feel bad, if you catch yourself thinking about such worthless scum, turn your mind to something better, don't waste one moment worrying about such idiots.


I liked the poem, short and sweet, conveyed a message, releases your angst too and gains support from those who are your friends: nice one.
Paul.

Mon, November 30th, 2009 4:33pm

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yupp, life's like that... thank you so much! :D
thanks for reading too!

Tue, December 1st, 2009 5:06am

Tetsuni

Heys, that's quite nice! I feel your anger behind the poem and I find the poem itself very meaningful.

Hahas, don't worry about it not being perfect or not well done. I suck at poems too:P

Tue, December 1st, 2009 5:28pm

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wow, you can feel the anger? cool! :D
haha, okay, at least i know i have company. XD
thanks for reading!

Tue, December 1st, 2009 9:29pm

xxNOxNAMExNINJAxx

ha thats probaly true! but i love my freinds to death is it too much to ask what happened? sorry im just really curious i mean good thing im not a cat! anyways like it but doesnt reakky sound like a poem but what am i saying i suck at poems!

Mon, December 21st, 2009 3:38am

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yeah, i have a group of friends i love to death too! :D

hmm, well, we were doing project and 2 of them were talking. then my anger flared and i used a fierce tone (uh, you use that when you're angry right? haha) then i left the meeting. then the next day for lecture the 3 of them completely ignored me. and they ignored me during class too. i know it's stupid, but i CRIED. yeah. it's like i sort of showed my temper and they're not my friends anymore? i never showed my temper before. and they do this to me! i have showed worser tempers at people who anger me, and my group of friends (the group i love :D) still stick with me! yeah, then after that they sent me a 9 message-long message sort of scolding me (about my temper!). thank god a friend of mine was there to read it with me. and i'm okay with the 3 of them now (the next day i posted this i think). 'cause we still have projects together. so it's very scary. yupp, that's about it. :D

and what cat? lol. haha! and never mind, frankly i don't know if this is a poem or whatever. :]

Sun, December 20th, 2009 8:23pm

Kimika

Well, it actually has a fairly good structure, though honestly you could improve it a bit. '^^ But I get what you're feeling; it's quite clear, hehe. Anyways, I hope that you solve(d) the problem with your friends. If you have time, maybe you want to check out some of my stuff? Hehe.

Sun, January 3rd, 2010 12:34am

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hmm, the shoutout was clear? haha. XD
yupp, solved! thank god. thanks for the concern too. =]
okay, sure! and thanks for reading! :D

Sat, January 2nd, 2010 6:50pm

purplecow919

Great Job!!! It was great! Dont listen to those who dont like it-they're probably the ones who (no offense to those people) cant write poetry. My first poem is now one that I can almost laugh at because it was NOT good. For your first time, that was fantastic! Keep it up!!! :)

Sat, January 9th, 2010 1:09pm

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wow. thanks so much for your enthusiasm!! XD
but then those who don't like it really write good poems, as in the stuff they write rhymes! so i think it's okay. and the main point wasn't much on the poem. XD
thanks so much!! =]
and thanks so much for reading my first ever poem and giving me such wonderful encouragement! thank you thank you!! :D

Sat, January 9th, 2010 5:23am

UnderxYourxSpell

Hmm, I'm going to have to disagree strongly with Behold. Firstly, some poems are a single line long – THEY'RE short – but this seems to be quite a nice length, otherwise you move into rant territory. Secondly, poems do not have to rhyme. I actually think this benefits from the lack of rhyme – it makes it seem more serious, and since it's about a more serious (or rather, annoying) issue it seems more apt. After all, would a poem expressing your annoyance at certain people being rude to you seem more effective with rhyme? Personally, I think not. It would have made it seem more like a joke. Finally, I thought that this had a very powerful message and was very well written. As for improvements, I think simply a stanza or two more would suffice, but other than that, I can't think of anything else to suggest. Good work here! :)

Sun, January 17th, 2010 7:53pm

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THANK YOU! THANK YOU! =]
and this makes me feel so much better an amazing writer like you thinks my poem is well written (together with all the disagree pointers)! :D

anyway, the first part of my 'A Strange Tale' was sort of inspired by me burning someone up. *hint hint* MUAHAHA. lol. XD

thanks for reading! :D

Mon, January 18th, 2010 6:29am

AquaBlue

wow... it feels like you wrote this while having sharp feelings... i liked it it's so true:DD

Wed, January 20th, 2010 1:57pm

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yeah! ugh. but oh well, this is part of life. =]

thanks for reading! :D

Thu, January 21st, 2010 5:00am

fairiegirl

I feel like this a lot with my friends but at the end of the day i couldn't get out of bed amd go to school if i didn't know they'd be there waiting for me lol. They work through my problems with me and they put up with all my moods. We fight a lot but in the end we make up and i love them. Sorry im babbling lol. I loved this poem and it described exactly how i feel in a fight, im happy you made up with your friends. Great poem :) xxxx

Mon, February 15th, 2010 1:03pm

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wow, thanks! though i think i won't like not want to stop going to school just because someone don't like me. i'll just go to other friends to gather support, LOL. and i have another loyal group for me to fall back on though we're not in the same class anymore!! :D

thanks for reading! :D

Mon, February 15th, 2010 6:09am

KyrieWasHere

oh, I liked this alot!
It was very expressive :)
I'm not usually into free-verse poetry, but I really did like this!
And espically when you do free-verse one of your first poems! I think you did a good job!
I agree with UnderxYourxSpell, this could use maybe another stanza. Doing that might give it a little more emotion, but I like it the way it is, too!
Well done =)

Wed, February 17th, 2010 2:33am

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wow... thank you with all the compliments!! :D
and advice taken! =]
thanks for reading! :D

Wed, February 17th, 2010 1:39am

PhoenixRain

this is good i didnt understand it at first but now i understand
friendship is a very important thing but sumtimes we choose the wrong friends
its good keep writing

Wed, July 28th, 2010 6:14pm

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hmmmm, but there are some people you can't like have them 'get out' of your world totally though. =]
anyway, thanks for reading! ^^

Thu, July 29th, 2010 12:13am

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