Flint: short story prologue
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Short Story by: Austin Converse
The following story is a work in progress
“What’s this one?” Dr. Raynes asked as he held up an alphabet card.
“Hmmm… L,” said the little boy.
“Good. And what’s this?”
“T,”
“Very good,” he said while shuffling through cards to find the next one to hold up. “And how about this one?”
“H,”
“Nice, and this one?”
“Q”
“Great job,” the doctor said while hugging him. “You’re really getting good at this. I’m so proud of you”
The doctor stood up and made his way towards the room’s exit.
“Where are you going?” the little boy asked. Dr. Raynes stopped and looked back at him, the same way a father looks at his son.
“Don’t worry, I’ll be back soon. In the meantime, why don’t you watch a movie?”. He stared back at him for a few seconds. “Ok?”
“Ok” said the boy.
The doctor looked back one more time before sliding his keycard into the slot and opening the door.
“Oh, hi Dr. Walter,” the doctor said. Dr. Walter stood right outside the room, leaning his back against the wall while staring into the small window of the little boy’s room.
“You’ve grown fond of him,” said Dr. Walter.
"Is that a bad thing?"
Raynes duplicated Walter’s fixed stare, admiring the pristine mystery of who the boy really is and where he came from.
“He’s not like the others,” said Dr. Raynes..
FLINT
Official poster
For long we've questioned the possibilities
We sought to understand something that others considered nonexistent
And now
Our questions may finally be answered
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SUMMER 2016
© Copyright 2020 Austin Converse. All rights reserved.
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I love sci-fi and alien stories so the summary interested me and the story seems as though it could be a bit sweet once its finished. I really cant say I have much opinion of it though. KMU though love I'll keep my eyes out for the finished material.
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Thanks :)
I didn't read the summary tbh, I just read what's here. I read it earlier (the preview) but i didn't have much to comment, but now I'm back bc I have much to comment :) I will be completely and totally honest bc u asked ;) so. There's not much going on here in this preview. I mean, I don't expect much, in a preview, not in word count, but as far as content. I expect a LOT more. You only get one chance to grab ppl and i feel like getting more info out of the blurb at the end instead of the 100-200 words before isn't really... The best approach. This preview seems like a mundane everyday kind of routine for our main characters, doesn't seem really... Preview worthy. If you added some kind of action...(I'm action hungry apparently, so take my advise with a grain of salt) like erm, the UFO crashing, or Walters and Jeuno ( I can't stop thinking about Alaska lol) arguing or something, then yeah, maybe. I don't know. I don't know, that's what I think. Happy writing! And KMU when you add :D
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You're right, this isn't a preview, it's a prologue, which is why it is so short. I don't know why I didn't catch on to that earlier, but thank you so much for pointing that out to me. I really appreciate your honesty. And yes lol I knew Jeuno would be kind of an off putting name. I am actually thinking about changing it to "Raynes" (as in "rains") to make things less confusing.
OH MY GAWD!! Now I understand what people mean when they tell me that my writing is suspenseful. I mean... Jesus. Why do you have to go torture me like this? Seriously, though, this seems like an amazing story. It's just so happy, yet so sad. I could probably very easily see where this story would go, but it's just so freaking awesome that I just NEED to read more of it. Besides the fact that you are the type of person who plays around with me a lot, and would probably add some sneaky plot twist that just drives me off the edge. ;P I can hardly wait for this. :) Amazingness. *-* PLEASE KMP for this. :D another awesome success, Austin. :)
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Thanks :)
Is the little boy an alien or something? That would be cool. I think I'm officially going to fan you now, this is so great and amazing and intriguing. Love it, man, I really love it. KMU, por favor. In the meantime, please read my story "Heartbreakers". Again great story, you're a wonderful writer, and I am craving more of this. ~DJ
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Yes he is. Thx:)
The premise is perfect. This could easily be made into a blockbuster film. You left us hanging there, please upload it sooner haha :) Can't wait to read the whole piece. Love it :D
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Thank you for commenting xD and I will be sure to check out your new short story as well. Sorry it's taking me so long.
Oh wow. This is so professional, and I'm very eager to read the novel. Please inform me of when you begin posting it!
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It's actually a short story, not a novel, but I'm glad you liked it :)
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