Zealot

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70 virgins?yeah and i'm the rebirth of ernest hemingway.

this dismal precipice,
overlooking all creation,
what we've become,
leaves me at a loss for words,
horrendous atrocities,
committed in our quest for faith,
how can you believe,
this would be condoned by god,
do you really,
think these acts will be rewarded,
you won't have amnesty,
much less a pedestal,
you'll burn with the rest,
those black with sin,
more so perhaps,
than those that are truly blind,
you won't find pity here,
i might even burn beside you,
but my sins were never,
a holy crusade.

Submitted: August 26, 2009

Poetry religion zealot

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zer0

A good poem conveying some relatively original(original for booksie anyhow) perspectives on the hypocrisy of organized religion, most of which I would, by the way, have to agree with you on. And all of this distilled within a concise, yet effectively tight form and conveyed with clear, to the point language.
All in all great work, I will endeavor to check out more of your work when I get the time.

Wed, August 26th, 2009 11:04am

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thank you for taking the time to read and comment.all comments are welcome(from encouragement to criticism). whenever you have time you should read some of the works of guff01 another writer on this site who isn't merely changing the words of others and calling them their own.

Wed, August 26th, 2009 4:17am

Froodle

i agree with zer0, this poem is quite strong and compelling. I love the emotion set into it and the fully guarded feeling of your words. Not stubborn, but loyal to the cause. good job

Wed, August 26th, 2009 4:48pm

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thank you my friend always a pleasure to have your opinion.

Sat, August 29th, 2009 7:41pm