My Friend And Me

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

there are two friends, who live miles apart after glorious years of friendship embellished with love and it is now they realise that its a relation all about Belief, Trust and Understanding. separation is a trivial thing.

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An odyssey rested by eternal seclusion
fantasies and plans a mere illusion
in life we met only to soar
to worlds aloof, sans a common shore.

 

My red heart, stifling with blues
with goodness hefty over them
in love with fresh air, still peruses
the bygone wind that holds my helm.

Pluck it, you’ll see
my breath will cease
not for brisk blood in veins
but for my dear you estrange.

 


The old years shall never die
breathtaking were its days
 embraces, tears, smiles of my
beloved in’em stays.

 


Slips and trips don’t make me sore
nor does the reminiscence of days of yore
but an overturned beetle is much like me
scenting , the veracity
 ‘ time that slides never revives’

 

You’re my sun
for you I’ll chase the horizon
seeking what I’ve forever sought.
when with chains of truth, hearts are tied,
it’s amazing to love, with the freedom to love not.


Submitted: February 02, 2014

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Mike Stevens

Quite excellent; have you tried to get published?

Sun, February 2nd, 2014 2:28pm

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that.. is a wonderful first comment!! thank you mike for your appreciation and. in response to your query, no, i havent yet tried to get published, but i certainly will in near future.. .
will let u knw.. till then keep reading my work and giving me your valuable comments. thanks once again!

Mon, February 17th, 2014 11:38am

Shahidkhan

Hmmm...amazing piece. Loved it, some lines are really outstanding and fresh. Good work!

Mon, February 3rd, 2014 1:13am

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thank u!

Mon, February 17th, 2014 11:28am

Amberly Sue

I love the originality in this piece. Nice Job!

Mon, February 3rd, 2014 10:56am

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thanks,, :)

Mon, February 17th, 2014 11:28am

AndreaCannon

Amazingly write and put as we speak in riddles for the understanding of it bigger than us a open mind will take you a mile a close one will have you in a nightmare a while VERY INTRIGUING.. You are

Mon, February 3rd, 2014 3:21pm

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hmm, i was a good student in my english classes back in high school, but could never get the jumbled sentences right!! .and that hasn't changed yet :(. still, i can make out, you liked the poem, and have appreciated it, thats enough for me. thanks! :P :)

Mon, February 17th, 2014 11:27am

jwb

Well done. Heart felt. I like it. You get my vote.

Mon, February 3rd, 2014 11:39pm

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thanks! :)

Mon, February 17th, 2014 11:22am

Ned Godleads

lovely piece so awesome

Tue, February 4th, 2014 11:06am

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thanks for reading.

Mon, February 17th, 2014 11:22am

Sk2093

Wow. I agree with Mike Stevens, this poem is really really good. I felt like I was reading straight out of a published book (a GOOD book :)) I really enjoyed it and love your choice of words and sentence structures, gives it the right rythm for the right emotions played. Well done and beautifully written, gets a 'like' from me. Oh and I like your picture too! :) - Sk2093 x

Wed, February 5th, 2014 11:18am

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some great words of appreciation.

made my day.. thanks..

Mon, February 17th, 2014 11:22am

ashi17

Very well crafted poem, words are beautifully knit into emotions. Well done my co-poet...
keep writing & rocking...

Wed, February 5th, 2014 3:27pm

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thanks ashi! glad u liked it..

Mon, February 17th, 2014 11:20am

Thankyou001

This was very sweet. I loved reading it tbh x

Thu, February 6th, 2014 1:19am

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glad to knw that, thanks for reading..

Mon, February 17th, 2014 11:19am

Raga

execellent..I loved it..keep the good work :)

Sat, February 8th, 2014 2:57pm

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i definitely will! thanks..

Mon, February 17th, 2014 11:19am

Ally Shark

Good poem!!! I like the line "Slips and trips don't make me sore." Teehee I like rhyming! ???? On a more serious note, this poem has a lot of meaning. Good job!

Sat, February 8th, 2014 8:28pm

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thanks!

Mon, February 17th, 2014 11:18am

Ever A. Darling

I think this is definitely worth publishing (: great work. I love it (:

Sun, February 9th, 2014 1:23am

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haha! well, at this point of time i take it just as an appreciation rather than thinking over getting published...
thnks for reading and praise!

Mon, February 17th, 2014 11:17am

SoftDreamer7

Wow. So deep yet original! The flow...It is so excellent! Amazing job. Keep me updated. C:

Mon, February 10th, 2014 6:25am

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thanks ! and i will..

Mon, February 17th, 2014 11:14am

shyam sundar bulusu

What do I say, Mr. Awaneesh, to such a sentimental poem? It was tremendous. Only one observation; I don’t know how far I am correct, though. I think “afar” would have conveyed the meaning better than “aloof”. You might have had your specific poetic reasons for using that particular expression. I was right when I wrote to you that I have much to learn from you. You got my I LIKE IT.

Mon, February 10th, 2014 1:38pm

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well i agree sir, "afar" would have fit just right.
thanks for liking the poem. your appreciation and view really counts.

Mon, February 17th, 2014 11:13am

JoelatRpg

Wow! I like how well this poem rhymed, and especially the last part about how amazing to love is. And, I noticed that you have an illustration with this poem, which I really like!:) You have talent. Thanks for sharing:)

Mon, February 10th, 2014 10:15pm

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thanks for dropping by!

Mon, February 17th, 2014 11:10am

Eden L

Wow! A very powerful poem! XD I like it! And the picture that you uploaded was so cute. :D :D The flow of the poem was very smooth and nice. :3

Tue, February 11th, 2014 3:57am

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thanks. glad u liked it.

Mon, February 17th, 2014 11:09am

Joshua White

wow! So deep, and beautiful too! your right, it was like the opposite of mine haha but seriously, im at a loss for words :) liked!

Tue, February 11th, 2014 3:11pm

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thank you for reading and the nice comment :)

Mon, February 17th, 2014 11:08am

FunWriting

Sorry just getting to this :) ahhahahahaa the picture made me laugh :D This had an amazing flow to it and showed great work :D loved the poem :)

Mon, February 17th, 2014 4:26pm

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thanks!

Mon, February 17th, 2014 11:07am

J. W. Cooper

Wow!!! Now that was a fantastic poem! As others have mentioned in the comments, I loved the originality of this piece, you've obviously spent a lot of time and effort into writing this one. My favourite part of the poem was where you write "You are my sun, for you I'll chase the horizon." I think that is a really powerful part of the poem for me. Absolutely brilliant!! What more can I surely say? Keep up the superb work Mr Awaneesh. :)

Fri, February 21st, 2014 11:22am

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thanks for dropping by. and yes it more of a exertion of mind that time, and i enjoy evry minute of it.!

Fri, February 21st, 2014 10:54am

Irwinagain

Interesting work that requires and deserves, several readings in order to digest and appreciate the thought process and creative intellect involved in producing such a piece. I look forward to reading more of your work.

Sun, January 17th, 2016 8:28pm

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thank you sir! appreciate ur time and comment .i look forward to reading more of ur work

Sun, January 17th, 2016 8:35pm

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