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It exsplains a girl going through the process of commiting suicide... but theres a twist at the end!

The pain i suffered i can not let go,the things i saw you would never understand let alone know,I hated myself and everything I lived for sometimes i wished i would die, or be sold as a hor, i ment nothing to anyone let alone you, So thats why i did what i had to do

Monday September 22 4:00pm

I walked to the kitchen toward the silverwear took the longest sharpest knife and held it in the air. The glare from the knife could have blinded the seeing, the shapness of the knife could have cut an actrual human being

First i took it to the rist...cut deeply, the pain i felt was not from the sharpness of the knife,but from life. a single tear fell from my eye for the thought i was going to die. Next i took it to the neck cut slightly around as the blood dripped i fell to the grounB.

 Looking at the ceiling for the few minutes i had left, feeling the blood go from my neck to my chest feeling the pain of my rist I pinched it and it was not what it seemed...

I OPEND MY EYES TOO RELIZE... IT WAS JUST A DREAM

 


Submitted: February 07, 2007

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Nick Dwyer

Yes, you genuinely cannot spel, and I like it lots because it gives everything you write an amazing edginess.

Do you know even the title is misspelt?

By the way, the "It's all a dream" ending is not allowed any more because it um, suks.

But I love all this because it's so much more alive than loads of pompous badly written drivel on this site (including mine) and I want to be a fan. This story is fast and acidic, like a house-track by Derrick May. He can't spell either.

You'd like Poewhit. Check him out. Under P in the writer's list.

Yeah, top of this page. : + }

Sat, February 17th, 2007 12:57am

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lol Well thanks i try, and ill definitly check him out thanks again for the tip

Fri, February 16th, 2007 5:27pm

Zan Vanny

Nice story. For future reference, maybe you could type the story on MS Word and then spell check?

Do read my poem

Zan

Tue, January 15th, 2008 11:11pm

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well thanks for the tip but i've come to like my illiterate style:} and i wll read it asap!

Thu, January 24th, 2008 11:22pm

smircle

You described her pain very well, and it was quite emotional. It was sad to read about what she was going through and how she ended up coping with it. Your descriptions were good, though it was a little difficult to read at times with the spelling. The rhyming was good, too; it took me a few lines to realize they rhymed, but it flowed well and it was creative. Good job! :)

Wed, September 24th, 2014 7:18pm

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I'm proud to say I've come a long way since 2009, but I feel your pain, it's of the few I left posted despite the grammatical erros because of the creativty. Thank You!

Fri, September 26th, 2014 7:39am

Margaret Snowdon

I enjoyed your story, my friend, but you need to spell check and add missing periods on the end of a sentence, as the work couldn't possibly be published without editing.

Tragidy - Tragedy
Sold as a hor???? whore
eyes to relize - realize

sorry, I'm an editor as well as an author and find it hard not to correct.


Good luck.
Margaret

Fri, October 3rd, 2014 4:51pm

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We'll thanks, I put a disclaimer in my about me, this piece is five years old.

Sat, October 4th, 2014 4:51pm

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