...That Moment...
Poem by: Basilia
The Moment
Drowns out my voice to your symphony
Into fathoms of thoughts to accompany
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The chords of heart, plays every string
When I sense you like daffodils in spring
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Blooms bright smile as my eyes beseech
For your presence , in silent melody speech
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Besotted with you in bossom of this moment
Seeks a ripple of pleasure ambient
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Freeze oh time! when I reflect deep
In his charming eyes, in his arms as I seep
Basilia
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You capture this moment perfectly. The imagery that is conjoured by your words is beautiful. I feel LOVE through out this poem.
I like that you used a near rhyme when you needed it to keep your message and flow as it should be.
I enjoy how rich in poetic sentiment this is, making for a most enjoyable read.
Thanks for sharing
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that's really happy to know how deeply you got connected to my work.thank you Mr.Joe :) thank you very much for encouraging comment :)
just amazing work, love this radiant jewel, soooo bright, deep and loving. AWESOME STUFF, glows like you. Thanks for putting this up!
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thank you!! Vincey :) thanks for the lovely comment :)
brilliant.. i like your poem.. very creative:) you really describe the feeling of being in love through those words..
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aahh...thank you! this truly from heart
Excellent word play. I liked that. Keep writing!
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thank you :) so much for going through my works and leaving your valuable comments
Hello Basilia
Nice moment....excellent work .... nice imagery.. and great expression of feelings...
--Shaleheen
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thank you Shaleheen :) for going through my work and leave a comment :)
Very good poem! The use of words and the lyrical element in the poem is excellent. I equally liked this poem in the January issue of the, 'Reflection.' Thanks a lot for sharing this poem with us.
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Aww...thank you so much brother :)
I think that was a fantastic wordplay. Unable to understand half the words you used, I lost my time haha...
Keep writing.
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ha ha...lost your time trying to understand what I wrote? OMG1 but thank you brother for sparing time to read my works :)
Awesome love poem this was very good! maybe better than some of the ones I wrote and they were pure emotion :) I think the last word of the poem should be sleep though
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Aaah! Thank you :) no ..its actually seep not sleep.I tried to depict the way water enters into the crevices leaving no space is the way I wanted to hug him :)
Ahh.. It is really damn romantic, loved it !
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Aww...thank you di... :)
Veryyyy sweeeet
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Hahaha..thank you..! :) :)
Am speechless... I need to see a Dentist
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Lol..Thank you! Jerry I guess not the dentist :)
The timeless moment of Love, when all the world disappears if only but for an instant. you have brought this through in such an artistic way.
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Yeah..!!That moment..of love can take us into a different world..Thank you from bottom of my heart for such lovely comments
Romantic & Hopeful sounds like a young girl
s expectant heart.Before it's broken Big Sigh!
Remember trust betrayed is trust lost.(sadly.)
Keep writing.
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Thank you...random romantic thoughts and expectations by the girl in poem.. :)
I loved the last two lines most... This poem is mysterious and lovely. you can come back and read mine too,I would really feel glad if you do this..waiting eagerly.
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Thank you dear..Its my pleasure to read your works.I would soon check them :) tc
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