Blue Cocoon
Within these walls, my blue cocoon,
climb dirty plates and coffee cups.
My paintings hang uneven, slant,
on crumbling walls, whose cracks i feel.
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A button's pushed: the T.V sleeps.
The metal God sleeps standing,
as a ghost of night that dreams of days
on an unmade bed in limbo lays.
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Beneath the sheets my shadow rolls -
I twist and turn in turmoil.
My pulse pumps out a beat beserk.
In a sea of sweat i'm drowning.
Submitted: April 14, 2010
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i have no words to speak.......but would like to tell you
It touched myheart real deep and almost in tears
Hey I can't really give much advice, not a fan at all of poetry that doesn't rhyme! I was inspired by Rhythm and Poetry (RAP)
Is your caps button broke? Or is is a conscious thing to write everything in caps?
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HA HA, JUST CAN'T BE BOTHERED TO WRITE THINGS USING LOWER CASE THEN CAPITALS MATTY. I'M A LOVER OF RAP TOO IN A BIG WAY, IT'S JUST THAT WHEN FORCING RHYME IN POETRY RATHER THAN RAP OR HIP HOP IT CAN SOUND AS IF YOU'VE JUST PUT ANY OLD WORD IT TO MAKE IT FIT. JUST AN OBSERVATION.
Sun, December 16th, 2012 3:38amThis was very emotive and I liked the rhyme in your poem. I understand the feeling of being depressed.
Tue, December 18th, 2012 5:03pmThis was touching and true about losing a loved one. The image of dirty plates and coffee cups stacking up really emphasizes depression, along with disturbed sleep. A sad poem, but one I think everyone can relate to.
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ChelseaB
I really like this poem.Great job!It expresses how your world can be turned upside down, with nothing the same as it once was.
Thu, April 15th, 2010 2:24amAuthor
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thanks chelsea, kind of u to say. i'll read some of your stuff in a little while
Thu, April 15th, 2010 1:26am