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On Behalf Of The Dead

 

This is for those who’ll die tomorrow

Now planning for ages to come

“Broken alarms cannot be fixed

With paper clips and minted gum”

A homeless guest so featureless

To know where he is coming from

 

He lives within that hollow promise

Between those hopes however old

Inside the steel safe in the bedroom

Laying beside the buried gold

Far from the sun and its reflection

For life is warm and death is cold

 

The sleepless nights, the semi-whispers

The tortured souls that make my bed

Red collar slaves that never lived

But now at least they’re being read

The oldest song I’m chanting now

Written by spirits more than dead


Submitted: January 01, 2014

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Desilu

I love your imagery in this poem and your use of words.
The clock is ticking for us all.
Dee.

Thu, January 2nd, 2014 11:21am

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Thanks, I tried showing how oblivious people are toward death that we forget to live at all

Thu, January 2nd, 2014 6:28am

Irwinagain

Loved this. I have never understood people's preoccupation with religion which so fills their lives that living is lost in the mantras.

Sat, January 4th, 2014 9:55am

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Thanks for the comment

Sat, January 4th, 2014 2:10am

Luke Mullen

I think I’ll have to come back for a couple more reads to squeeze the fullness from this one, I like the sentiment of it and the fact that it is abstract/veiled slightly - I like it when I have to work for it a bit at first ... The dead are not the unfortunate ones, it is the ones that squander their life hiding from death that are... alas William Shakespeare said it better than I -- “A coward dies a thousand times before his death, but the valiant taste of death but once. It seems to me most strange that men should fear, seeing that death, a necessary end, will come when it will come.” Certainly an interesting write. Luke

Sun, January 5th, 2014 12:41am

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Death is simply defined as the end of life, but what can we say about those that haven't lived at all ?, postponing it as if tomorrow is visible while death is much more of a probability. I work as a graphic designer, and one of my clients who's grown into a friend inspired this poem, because he's always working and talking about retirement with the sentiments of someone who will not see it at all. Thank you for the read and the comment

Sun, January 5th, 2014 6:04am

optimysticynic

so very sad and unfortunately true for countless people; that trudge through life and stash their time and riches for another time. many of whom will never see it. makes me rethink how I spend my time..

Fri, February 7th, 2014 12:48am

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Glad to see that you can relate to it, I'm honored that you'll re-open Sara's Song because of my latest comment , waiting for the new chapters.

Fri, February 7th, 2014 2:40pm

angellynn

Love the imagery, and metaphor you created. Wonderful rhyme as well. A good poem is the story it reveals. That's the best part to me. Excellent penning fellow poet.

Angellynn

Wed, February 19th, 2014 3:24am

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Thanks

Wed, February 19th, 2014 1:55am

unmasked delusions

Loved everything about this, I would say their are a lot of unique lines in this but I thought all of them were clever! Great Imagery as well, I'm glad I read this. Great work

Sat, May 31st, 2014 4:20pm

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Thank you very much for the blush-inducing comment, this made my day !!

Sun, June 1st, 2014 9:15am

Mr Watson

Sadly it comes to us all, the description all the way through brings many thoughts, a superb piece Ben, truly poetic.

Sat, August 9th, 2014 4:58pm

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Nothing sad about it if we live life to its fullest, the only sadness can occur while living, thanks for the great comment.

Sat, August 9th, 2014 10:01am

Ina mcfarmers

Waw !!! You write poetry like this & yet left a very humble comment of my writing classed as poetry but really should have been classed under article , this is poetry at its best & it's a pleasure to be reading such deep and meaningful poetry from your pen I look forward to reading many more pieces of your previous work your wording , rhyming , topic , s are just breath taking : all the best : Ina .
Ps: thanks for commenting otherwise I might never have found your page !

Tue, August 19th, 2014 11:14pm

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It's hard not to feel flattered after such a comment, but I have to say that this is the way that booksie was meant to operate, we as writers must keep looking for other pens ro compare to ours, and I try doing this most of the time, by reading for my fans' fans and then fanning them (pun unintended), and sometimes by just checking out new entries. Thanks for stopping by and making my day.

Wed, August 20th, 2014 10:26am

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