I Know.

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Other  |  House: Booksie Classic

I decided to write something positive so please Enjoy.

I know what it is like

To feel alone

Cold, betrayed, hurt

Cut to the bone

 

I know you want to take that knife

Gash away your sin

I know you want to take those pills

To Overdose beneath the unharmed skin

 

But stop and think about those whom love

The bitches that you hate

All of the enemies would win the war

Should your life you take

 

So hear my voice

Reminds you not to bleed

I am always here

Death you really do not need.

 

I hear you cry

Begging for life

I will reach my hand for you

Remove the harmful knife

 

Allow me to aid your cause

Take the saviours hand

Let your mind defeat the pain

Save you from that distant land


Submitted: November 17, 2011

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Megstar1563

wow, this was something really nice to write mad and you were right, I felt good and better on every line

Thu, November 17th, 2011 7:45am

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hahahaha Thank you. It may not be as powerful as my daarker desperate poem attempts but this is something I think many people never hear until it is to late.

Wed, November 16th, 2011 11:49pm

Ian Dawn

Your a natural and a tad cocky as well I likey

Nice work mate your poems are growing with your release of emotion and starting to become thoughtfull and deep.

Nice

Thu, November 17th, 2011 9:35am

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Thank you. I am not cocky. LOL I know I am only a newb and I am trying to expand and test what I can get away with. Thank you for commenting.

Thu, November 17th, 2011 1:56am

LizLew

Awesome, as usual Mad. And actually, you could get away with being cocky, because you're brilliant. (Don't go cocky -_-)

Anyways, nice going Mad. Liked. :)

Thu, November 17th, 2011 4:46pm

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Thanks Liz. Hahhahaa I don't want to be cocky :(.

Thu, November 17th, 2011 3:37pm

Sgroi123

I wouldn't say that's exactly positive? I like this poem but you could include a symbol like an image of the grim reaper or a god associated with death to give even more meaning.

Fri, November 18th, 2011 9:46am

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Its positive in the way I am saying I understand and I will help you. But the examples are negative. I need a better image I agree but The grim reaper and death is most certainly NOT what I want to say. I am trying to say NO to all of that.
LOL anyways Thank you for reading

Fri, November 18th, 2011 1:55am

Shannan Browne

Like it :-)

Wed, November 23rd, 2011 9:54am

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Thanks mate.

Wed, November 23rd, 2011 2:39am

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