Die for you(blackstar07)

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

the girl that talking to her self and see everything's wrong don't wait for nothing it's no use

Die for you

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Dont stare at he mirror if you know who you are

Dont hate yourself

Dont fear death

For how many times I tried to break my shadow

But still I'm breathing

I'm alive

what you see is an illusion

Everything is fake

The girl that keep on smilling to her fake friends

Rose that being left for how many decades

And your love that being erase in my memeory

Waiting for you for how many years

But you never come back

I die screaming your name in front of a mirror


Submitted: March 29, 2012

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Christian Taylor

Wow! This was powerful....i'm impressed!

Thu, March 29th, 2012 10:31am

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thanks very much friend :)

Thu, March 29th, 2012 7:48pm

AMEENAH

cooolllll awesomeeee reallyyy inspiring it truly defines meeee hahahahha xD jk xD xD

Thu, March 29th, 2012 2:00pm

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thanks very much friend :)

Thu, March 29th, 2012 7:49pm

Courtney Vail

Wow. This was intense and powerful.

Thu, March 29th, 2012 2:17pm

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thanks very much friend :)

Thu, March 29th, 2012 7:50pm

Princess21

Very nice.

Thu, March 29th, 2012 5:29pm

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thanks very much friend :)

Thu, March 29th, 2012 7:51pm

onlyinred

I love how mysterious yet loud it is in its meaning! Very dark, and descriptive. I really liked your vocabulary and use of words to show what you mean in a graceful way. Illusions, falseness and waiting for that person..It's very good and can be relatable. Good job! I really liked it! Keep writing because you have a talent! :D

Thu, March 29th, 2012 9:53pm

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thanks very much friend :)

Thu, March 29th, 2012 7:52pm

whiteroses

this is very intense!!
i felt the energy!!
great work!! x

Fri, March 30th, 2012 4:22am

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thank you :)

Thu, March 29th, 2012 11:12pm

RazorBlade

A nice poem with some minor spelling issues. Should be "Everything is fake" not "are"... Also second line yourself is one word... make those changes so your poem has a more professional appearance. Good job!

Sat, March 31st, 2012 9:49am

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thank you :)

Sat, March 31st, 2012 3:10am

Madhuri

Very intense. Keep up. :)

Sat, March 31st, 2012 11:41pm

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thanks for the reading friend :)

Tue, April 3rd, 2012 12:14am

SmileValentine

NICE ONE TUKS!! XD

Sun, April 1st, 2012 4:40am

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wag ka magulo !

Tue, April 3rd, 2012 12:22am

Areen Abukishek

so much emotion
i love it

Sun, April 1st, 2012 9:58am

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thank you friend :)

Mon, April 2nd, 2012 11:57pm

Sammy Wang Yang

Powerful voice. Deep, dark, emotional! Love it. Please check my poem "What does it Say?" Thanks.

Sun, April 1st, 2012 12:15pm

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thank you friend :)OK i will :)

Mon, April 2nd, 2012 11:52pm

aellaie

apologies, I'm no poet, so I can't give you much advice, but I really enjoyed it :)

you have a few spelling mistakes, but if you pasted this into word, it will find them for you :)

I really liked the first line, it had a nice ring of truth to it. I also liked the line 'for how many times I tried to break my shadow'

well done and keep writing :) ~

Mon, April 2nd, 2012 11:40am

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thank you friend :)

Mon, April 2nd, 2012 11:47pm

MyVintageFairytale

That's so beautiful


MyVintageFairytale

Wed, April 4th, 2012 8:21pm

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salamat :P

Fri, April 6th, 2012 1:49am

Insane Membrane

lovely stuff .... and lovely picture I really like it

Thu, April 5th, 2012 6:31pm

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thanks :P

Fri, April 6th, 2012 1:40am

Ghonesis

Reminded me of a song: 'Die for you'. (Black Veil Brides) Thanks for that, and great poem of course! =D

Sat, April 7th, 2012 12:01pm

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i dont know that song hehe .. thanks :P

Sun, April 8th, 2012 4:56am

Ripples

wonderful pose very intense i felt what you were putting out there, nice job!

Sat, April 7th, 2012 5:55pm

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thanks :P

Sun, April 8th, 2012 4:57am

ashi17

You are excellent in expressions, which touches deeply........loved it :), keeps your pen moving and amazing your readers :)

Sun, April 8th, 2012 10:28am

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.. thanks :P

Sun, April 8th, 2012 5:00am

socorrita

Really like it. Please take the time to look at my last poem. --Socorrita :D

Mon, April 9th, 2012 12:31am

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thank you .. :P

Mon, April 9th, 2012 4:57am

Nichola Palermo

I like it very much, well done

Mon, April 16th, 2012 5:16am

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:P

Mon, April 16th, 2012 12:46am

YaSoora

That was intense and strong... Keep writing friend!

Mon, April 23rd, 2012 1:52pm

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thanks :)

Tue, April 24th, 2012 12:29am

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