I don't care.

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

I tried writing something about myself, on how I feel. I admit it isn't good since my mind was clouded but what the hell? I wanted to post something up.

 

I feel so cold

When you touch me

I feel so dead

When you move me

I feel so numb

When you’re inside me

 

I use to tell you to stop

Now I don’t care

It use to hurt like hell

But now I can bear

 

I use to scream

But now I keep silent

I use to cry

But now I keep quiet

 

I was a tree

That you stripped bear

You plucked all my leaves off

And the saddest thing is...

I don’t care. 


Submitted: May 20, 2012

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DarkAvenger

Nice poem mate. Sad.

Sun, May 20th, 2012 5:47pm

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Thanks

Sun, May 20th, 2012 10:47am

Ian Dawn

As you say the sadest thing is you dont care. I love and hate that line. Love it because it conveys the heart thats torn and hate it because we as humans will allow ourselves to sit back and take abuse or allow ourselves to be walked over. Its good dude dont second guess yourself, any expression of self is enlightening and interesting to us the reader, it brings us just a little closer to who you are. Believe me mate no-one knows what goes on in my mind fully not even me. And although I thought this was about an encounter it was more a tragic relationship you endured. well done.

Sun, May 20th, 2012 10:08pm

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Cheers mate. It is a pretty tragic relationship, thank you for reading.

Sun, May 20th, 2012 6:42pm

Deathstix

This is a sad poem, Alex ): But it's really good also! Keep up the good work, you awesome chaaaaap!! >XD

Mon, May 21st, 2012 4:00am

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Thanks Mocho :)

Sun, May 20th, 2012 9:00pm

Blackdragon99

wow. this is sad. I like how the sadest thing is I dont care, it is so true when you feel like that.

Wed, May 23rd, 2012 9:28am

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Yeah, when you no longer care about yourself, kinda a low point in life. thanks for reading mad

Wed, May 23rd, 2012 2:29am

Miss A

i loved this poem .... nvm if its sad.. after all even sadness is an emotion and I liked the way you brought it out through words ... lovely :)

Sun, May 27th, 2012 9:58pm

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Thanks Hun.

Sun, May 27th, 2012 3:02pm

JuztJames

MAN THIS IS GOOD!! and the sad thing is you probably dont care (lil jokey joke lol) but forreal i think you did a great job with this one, it was well written without wasteful words and straight to the point. keep up the writing!

Tue, June 12th, 2012 4:24am

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Thanks a lot

Sat, June 16th, 2012 2:07am

ZaneJayxxxxxx

Awesome. :3

Tue, July 10th, 2012 7:23pm

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Thanks

Tue, July 10th, 2012 12:28pm

xXxDanteAikenxXx

wow mate, someone's been a major asshole to you yeah? well fuck them. you've been taking on a lot of shit though eh? don't let it keep you down lad, everyone deserves to have their life. when you get out of whatever hell you're in, mate, say fuck it to the world and do what ya want. move out of the country, be a billionaire. hell anything works. fuck just do what ya want mate.

and the poem was good, lot of emotion in it. you can practically see images of pain and hurt and loss. very strong indeed eh?

Tue, July 24th, 2012 4:44am

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Wow thanks, this made my night xD

Mon, July 23rd, 2012 11:49pm

SoulShadowWalker

wow. its sad but i loved it.
my fave part "and the saddest thing is... i dont care"
can relate to that. keep up with the poetry; its bloody good =)

Fri, August 31st, 2012 7:23pm

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Thanks :)

Sat, September 1st, 2012 3:11am

PossiblyMine

I like it. I feel like it says your giving up. If there is one thing i have ever learned its never to give up on something :)

Tue, November 27th, 2012 4:51am

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I wrote this a while ago, but yeah I suppose your right :) Thanks

Mon, November 26th, 2012 8:52pm

jiji chocolate sweet

WOW!! very sad
I loved how you didn't say you hated her, or felt angry or anything, it's just that you don't care. when I read it I felt like you were saying you don't exist for me anymore, and felt sorry for whoever you wrote that for!!!
great job!!! I really love your work and keep coming back!!

Thu, December 20th, 2012 5:10pm

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Yeah this poem was pretty deep for me. I'm glad you like it, thank you

Thu, December 20th, 2012 6:11pm

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