Sparks.

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

I've never done poetry so I'm giving it a go and my friend told me to just write about how I feel so... here we go.

 

 

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The world can be cold and dark

With nothing left behind

The world can be soft and warm

Like lighting a flame of a single spark

 

I look through the world with dog coloured eyes

Black and white wherever I go

I can’t see the true colours that shine

I can’t see the good show

 

You were always there

I could see you’re black and white face

Even thinking about it makes me weep

But you are part of a cold hearted race

 

Now maybe you’re gone

Maybe the colour will shine through

Maybe my single spark will be lit

The one that you blew

 

I stay awake at night

Still trying to light my spark

So I can see the colour

Shining through the world

 


Submitted: May 11, 2012

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Lila Anne

:O This is amazing!! You have awesome writing skills! :D You must write more :P

Fri, May 11th, 2012 2:59pm

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haha thanks Lila, I'm really glad you like it :)

Fri, May 11th, 2012 8:07am

Deathstix

I like this alot, alex! This is your first time?! I'm impressed, chap :D Great job!

Fri, May 11th, 2012 7:47pm

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Thanks Mocho :)

Fri, May 11th, 2012 12:51pm

Ian Dawn

Damn my boy you have just written your first piece and by the way it was done it shows you were writing about either you or someone else as an experience. And remember the best prose come from Pain,suffering and love, somethimes all three can happen at the same time. Now I want to see more I would love you to dig deep inside yourself and tell us all in poetic verse more about the deep inside Blue Dragon. Alex bring us light and dark I want to see what makes you cry because of pain and love Thats the GOLD! awsome first up mate awsome. BRAVO!

Sun, May 13th, 2012 8:52am

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Really? Thanks, I'm glad its good. I have never written poetry before, I just put how I was feeling down and this was born. I guess I'll keep writing cos it was fun to put my feelings on paper in a form of different words.
Thank you a lot fore reading and I'm very glad you liked it mate. Thank you

Sun, May 13th, 2012 2:31pm

William Kael

Someones got talent for their first time. Please keep writing!

Mon, May 14th, 2012 12:55am

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Thanks :) I will

Sun, May 13th, 2012 5:57pm

Brian W

Well written it has good flow and the rhyme not bad...your emotions show through.....Keep writing

Tue, May 15th, 2012 5:36am

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Thanks man

Tue, May 15th, 2012 2:40am

Alisindra

You say that is your first time writing poetry?

Well then I have to say you have a talent. I loved the analogy you used to describe this world we live in and those around us at times. I thought that it was a unique way to do it. You definitely should write more. Please KMU when you do. ^_^

Sat, May 19th, 2012 7:40am

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Thank you :) I'll keep you updated, I'm glad you liked it.

Sat, May 19th, 2012 12:53am

Blackdragon99

Mate wow. You outdo me anyday, Incredible. Dog colored eyes? I picture expressionfilled eyes that reflect the shadows.

Wed, May 23rd, 2012 9:29am

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yeah me too, dog coloured for black and white, thanks

Wed, May 23rd, 2012 2:29am

Archia

I really enjoyed reading this, there was something great about it. I liked the idea about the spark that kept up throughout the piece. Great poem.

Wed, July 11th, 2012 1:00am

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Thanks

Wed, July 11th, 2012 12:28am

xXxDanteAikenxXx

damn kid, a first piece eh? well it's pretty quite right for a first piece. you've had some hidden talent in your life. gonna be tapping into it more hm? it's really good, i like your style mate

Wed, July 25th, 2012 1:05am

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Thanks a lot :)

Wed, July 25th, 2012 12:17am

Miss A

awesome and so descriptive .... loved it .. :)

Wed, October 10th, 2012 7:23am

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Thank you :)

Tue, November 13th, 2012 10:14pm

PossiblyMine

I love it! You are amazing at writing poetry.

Tue, November 27th, 2012 5:21am

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Thanks xP

Mon, November 26th, 2012 9:22pm

Hi Im a person

This honestly gave me goose bumps

Sat, March 16th, 2013 2:08am

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Good goose bumps? o.o
Haha thanks :)

Fri, March 15th, 2013 7:11pm

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