The Burning Tree

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

You decide.;) This is poetry after all.

Beneath the soles of his shoes

That new leaf he’s just turned over

Begins to crumble and flake

Into a dull confetti

That’s whisked by a quiet breeze

Whisked and tossed afar, afar, afar into an empty tar colored sky

 

The tree before him is bare

His mishap has charred the branches,

Billows of ash choke the air,

And the trunk seeps in droll flame.

Sap trails coil into a pool

Where his withering reflection taunts the promise of reconcile

 


Submitted: October 17, 2012

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tattooedmoon

Hi Bona Fide Voice, thank you for informing me about your poem.Good use of imagery and symbolism. I like your poem especially the first stanza. Keep me updated if you post a new one.

Kisses,
T

Wed, October 17th, 2012 3:30pm

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You're most welcome and thank you.

Wed, October 17th, 2012 2:45pm

Reader302

I don't understand poetry. That being said, I honestly don't get what this is about. But you used proper grammar/spelling, fancy words, and it was set up correctly, so it was good. :)
Sorry this review is so shitty, I just really don't understand poetry. :/ It sounds like you know what you're doing, though, you're a really good writer.

Wed, October 17th, 2012 10:18pm

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Honestly, I'm barely beginning to dip past the surface of poetry. I sling the words together, pin them up tight, and hope they won't fall. Thank you very much though. I really appreciate the honesty.:)

Wed, October 17th, 2012 5:05pm

Deathstix

haha-love poetry! I liked this and please keep it up!

Thu, October 18th, 2012 12:39am

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Thank you.:) I'll do that!

Mon, October 22nd, 2012 3:48am

BlondeBunny131

It's a beautiful poem- very vivid imagery! I could picture it perfectly in my mind.

Thu, October 18th, 2012 1:51am

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Thank you.:) And wonderful!

Mon, October 22nd, 2012 3:54am

thePageTurner

A wonderful poem indeed ! :)

Thu, October 18th, 2012 4:38am

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Why thank you!:)

Mon, October 22nd, 2012 3:54am

Darkprince108

Nice poem, I really enjoyed reading it :)

Thu, October 18th, 2012 11:26am

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Well thank you.:)

Mon, October 22nd, 2012 3:54am

DarkShadow666

This is me responding to your reading request! I like it, it flowed nicely and definitely wasn't boring. Although I did not understand what this is about, It is evident that you are quite a good poet. Keep it up, and let me know when you post something new! :D

Fri, October 19th, 2012 5:17am

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Well thank you.:) I'll try to portray a more clearly defined meaning in my next poem. I'll let you know when the next one is up and running!

Mon, October 22nd, 2012 3:53am

kimmysweetie08

I love how descriptive the poem was. This is really good. I wish you'll write more poems. :)I'd love to read all of it. Good job!

Sat, October 20th, 2012 12:07pm

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Thank you.:) I'm working on a few at the moment. Hopefully I'll have them posted soon.

Mon, October 22nd, 2012 3:51am

Soul_Dreamer

a wonderful poem, I hope you write more, if so let me know and i'd be so happy to read em :)
xxx Rash

Sun, October 21st, 2012 6:43am

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Thank you.:) I will definitely do that.

Mon, October 22nd, 2012 3:50am

Leonel Lawliet

Telling what it was about in the summary kind of made it lackluster.

Sun, October 21st, 2012 6:55am

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I really appreciate you notifying me of this. I'd been kind of oblivious to that idea. I'll adjust the summary so as to not take away from any possible luster. Thanks.:)

Mon, October 22nd, 2012 3:50am

143Alodia

Lyk........

Tue, October 23rd, 2012 6:53am

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Thanks!

Fri, November 2nd, 2012 3:05pm

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Tue, October 23rd, 2012 7:30am

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I apologize, but I'm a little befuddled. Would you mind explaining?

Fri, November 2nd, 2012 3:04pm

143Alodia

Lyk...and ur cute

Tue, October 23rd, 2012 1:13pm

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Thanks!

Fri, November 2nd, 2012 3:03pm

ScienceAndFaith

This poem was beautiful and you are such an amazing author!!! Thank you so much for inviting me to read it, i love it! Let me know when you publish anything else! I'll come running :))

Wed, October 24th, 2012 1:31am

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Thank you!:) And I'll be sure to do that!

Fri, November 2nd, 2012 3:02pm

Carlee

I absolutely love this. You did great. Keep writing(:

Sat, October 27th, 2012 11:14pm

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Thanks!:)

Fri, November 2nd, 2012 3:01pm

Surya1

You write picture dear!Really!I am too dull to get the exact meaning but well done.

Sat, August 17th, 2013 6:27pm

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