Fleeing into darkness, poem by brokenwings07

Fleeing into darkness

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Poem by: brokenwings07

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Status: Finished | Genre: Poetry | House: Booksie Classic

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The shadow that once was filled by your loved one..

Submitted: December 22, 2011

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Submitted: December 22, 2011

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You left me completly shattered

You forgot about what truly mattered

Partying and girls are only your temporary dedsire

It's not what we all require

Turning your back on someone you love

It will not bring you above

Right decision, you think it is

You'll notice it is as fake as showbiz

Being single is not a way of life

You'll most definatly be in a need of a wonderful wife

Whom you'll love and cherish

But you'll remember you left it all perish

Tears are running down my cheeks

I can no longer speak

I thought I was your everything

Instead you disappeared and you left me crying

I'm falling deep down in despair

I only wanted us to be a life long pair

No matter, I'll always be there for you

It will never change, to me you are my boo

Slowly, I see you pulling away

On my sides, I just want you to stay

Love you,I' ll always do

Take me in your arms one last time and tell me you do too.

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JadAtHrt

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Thu, December 22nd, 2011 1:33pm

I like the poem, though there are areas that need correcting. Simple things, like "desire" instead of dedire ( I think that was just a typo. Things like that.

I've been here before, and it sucks. No matter how unlikely it seems, things have a way of working out.

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Tue, January 3rd, 2012 10:51am

thank you for your support, (:

Akyra Thalassa

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Thu, December 22nd, 2011 3:13pm

Very, very, sad. Your very expressive, and the poem sounds great.

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Fri, December 23rd, 2011 8:11pm

Thank you very much, it's very encouraging. I will definitely continue writing. :)

Gibson

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Sat, December 24th, 2011 12:21am

poetry is first and foremost about feeling (for me anyway) and in this piece I can feel my heart break as I read it not only the first time but every time it is beautiful thank you for sharing it with us.-Gibson

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Sat, December 24th, 2011 6:53am

You are so nice, thank you so much for your encouragement (: