The battle against the night

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

I wrote this poem for a contest, I thought I would share it with you. :)
This poem is about the hard times we all face in our lives.

 

The darkness is settling
I feel the coldness enveloping
My heart is beating stronger
my whole body starts to shiver

 

I don't want to open my eyes
It is where the truth lies
I know my heart needs repair
but i can only look blankly with despair

 

I struggle and scream
Hoping it's just a bad dream
My body is filled with fear
I feel that the end is near

 

With every last breath
I am battling against death
I finally manage to open my eyes
It is filled with the beauty of the sunrise

 

Tonight, will be another fight
I will become stronger at every sight
Life, everyday I will cherish
Until the day that I perish


Submitted: December 24, 2011

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Rosiejb

wow this is amazing i can feel the emotion from every word it gave me a shiver down the spine love it :D

Sat, December 24th, 2011 7:26pm

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Thank you very much (:

Sat, December 24th, 2011 8:02pm

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GiggleMonster2

This is really good, beautiful even. I can really feel the emotion being portrayed here. However, with every positive aspect comes a negative one. Well not necessarily negative but, per say, constructive criticism. Anywho, for future poems, if you start off without rhyme, finish wiithout it. Some poems go good with rhyme. In my opinion, I felt this poem could benefit more w/o the rhyme. It throws it off a bit. Don't get me wrong, I like it!(:

It's just one girl's opinion.
-Zarah!
P.s thanks for your kind words about my own poem!(: I greatly appreciate it!

Sun, December 25th, 2011 4:23pm

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thank you very much Zarah (:
I will try a poem without rhymes, never did that before. Another experience on it's way (:

Sun, December 25th, 2011 9:16am

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Brian W

How did you go in the contest??? A good poem I enjoyed the read

Wed, December 28th, 2011 5:10am

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I am also writing on another site which contests are offered for different occasions (:
And thank you :)

Fri, December 30th, 2011 12:16pm

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Samarah

Its beautiful.

Thu, July 4th, 2013 7:01am

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thank you, your support is very much appreciated!

Thu, July 4th, 2013 7:39am

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