"Drunk Tonight" is a poem I wrote the night before my seventeenth birthday. I was in my room, sitting in my bed, lonely, that's where my thoughts and ideas usually come from.

I want you drunk tonight

I’ll regret it in the morning

But it’ll be worth it a few hours.

 

I want you happy tonight

No stress, no pain, just plain free.

Just you and me; nothing would matter.

 

I’ll hear the words you never say

You’d do the things you never do.

You’d tell me I’m your grown up man;

You’d tell me I’m your pride, your entire world.

 

I’d hold your hand and say

That I love you the same way.

You’d let me be myself

Even if it’s just tonight, you’ll see the real me.

 

You’d say happy birthday

Showing that you really care.

You’d be mine, and mine only.

 

I want you drunk tonight

I want you by my side tonight.

I want a goodnight kiss like when I was a child

 

Though you will not remember in the morning

The trouble would’ve been worth it, just for one night.

I’ll always treasure those words you said

If you just come drunk tonight.


Submitted: January 04, 2012

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Robert Kerr

Great stuff. Very evocative.

Wed, January 4th, 2012 4:42pm

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Thanks :)

Wed, January 4th, 2012 8:46am

kenra

I like this!

Just that the stanza and paragraphing is a little weird. I don't know if that's your style..

Anyhow, it's great and I really like this!

Fri, January 6th, 2012 10:37pm

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Yeah, I know it's a little weird. Truth is, I haven't really educated myself on how I should write poems, I just write them the way they come to my mind. I am going to take classes because I want to learn how to write professionally. Thanks for your constructive critiscm, it's helping me a lot :)

Fri, January 6th, 2012 4:46pm

haunt sorrow

nice peom

Sat, January 7th, 2012 7:46am

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Thanks a lot :)

Sat, January 7th, 2012 4:34am

bobthebuilder

Interesting, but you are too young to drink! I'm a dad, by the way. You're grounded.

Sat, January 7th, 2012 5:38pm

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I don't drink, at all, anything, just water, juice, and soda :D I was using it as a metaphore. Some people are usually happy when they're drunk, so that's why I said "I want you drunk tonight", because when you're drunk, you'll tell me the things you wouldn't tell me. "Drunk" means "happy" in this poem :) For how long am I grounded? ;)

Mon, January 9th, 2012 12:50pm

Indie Skreet

You say it well and can be interpreted in any way the reader wishes. I read your comments, but I like the idea of the meaning as literal 'drunk', but most know the skill is getting someone when they're sober :)

Tue, January 29th, 2013 1:24am

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Thank you for your comment!

Tue, January 7th, 2014 11:28am

Emmett Cohl

Wow, yet another brilliant poem from one of the most amazing poets I have ever been blessed to encounter. Your use of language and tone was highly significant in this poem, and I feel it added an entire other element to this. I love your work, and I love you (as a poet, I'm not single!!!) Keep it up!!!

Tue, July 9th, 2013 3:17pm

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Thanks a lot! It really means a lot to me; this was one of the first I wrote when I was sixteen, so I don't consider it my best but it's really close to my heart. I am so flattered by that comment, you really made my day! Thank you so much for that!

Tue, July 9th, 2013 10:05am

zoesierraaa

amazing, very well written

Wed, July 9th, 2014 7:38am

Ephemeral Dawn

You took the time to read mine, for which I am so grateful to you. I thought I'd return the favour. I really like this poem. It captures the wild desires that one will at some point encounter with a loved one - or someone who they are strongly attracted to. It is fitting that you seem to describe everything that you want 'tonight' as something you've either never had before, or not had for a long time, which makes this poem so much more powerful and with it, brilliant. I also love the point you make that it will not be remembered in the morning, making it seem so important to you know, but over time (not very much time) it becomes rather futile as is equally means nothing.

That was just my take on it and I may be wrong, but I thought this poem was a work of genius, and I really enjoyed it. Well done!

Tue, June 6th, 2017 8:23pm

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Wow, thank you so much for taking the time to read my work! Honestly, I wish Booksie didn't feature this poem on my profile as it was the first ever poem I ever wrote and I've gotten way better with time, but at that specific moment of my life, I needed to be loved by that person, who was an alcoholic. So that's why the "tonight" references, as they would be more loving while drunk.

Once again, thank you so much for taking the time to read my work! I am truly humbled!

Tue, June 6th, 2017 1:25pm

Rehmat Tanzila

Beautiful poem!

Tue, July 11th, 2017 5:49am

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