The torment of waiting

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Young Adult  |  House: Booksie Classic
Caron begins to question her sanity after a what seems to be an eternity of waiting in the car for her mother to return.

Submitted: July 12, 2013

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Caron always found her ears started to ring when she was left in the car, alone, when her mom went shopping. She wondered if she was going mad and the ringing was only in her mind. Anyway, she hated the solitude because it always left her feeling tired and restless at the same time.

The heat always made her mom's car smell of the sand and grit that became trapped in the crevasses and carpetting on the floor of the car. Small change and other less desirable knick knacks could also be found nestled away in these hard-to-reach places. If Caron could summon the energy to collect it, she'd have a small fortune in small change, she thought.

She found herself wondering at the strangeness of the thoughts that popped into her idle mind when she was alone. Sitting on the hot passenger seat watching the boring people with their boring grocery shopping walking to their  boring cars, Caron imagined doing things with her teeth. She imagined dragging her front teeth across the car's fuzzy carpet and shivered. She hated how she felt this wierd compulsion to imagine doing these things with her teeth. It was fuzzy carpets and blackboards. They tickled her in ways nothing else could.

Caron's mother Sandra, remembered she'd left her daughter waiting in the car after her friend Patty enquired after the girl. "Oh shit! I'd better go - she's been waiting there this whole time." Smiling and waving to her friend, Sandra pushed her trolley towards the checkout line, it's wheels rattling against the divides between the smooth tiles on the floor of the supermarket. 

Caron had heard something about more people comitting suicide in heat-waves than any other time. Sitting in this goddamn oven of a car, Caron could well imagine this being true. "Why was she taking so long!?" Caron wondered, "Doesn't she know I'm going fucking crazy waiting for her here?!" Caron pulled on her seatbelt and took hold of it with her teeth.

Feeling a twinge of guilt about chatting to Patty for so long, Sandra manouvered the heavy trolley towards the parking lot. "Oh well, I'm sure she had some homework or something to keep her occupied for this long."

Caron could hear the blood pounding in her ears. It sounded awfully like demonic voices telling her over and over again at the rhythm of her heartbeat, to commit violent acts. "Fuck. I can't take this shit any longer." Caron was just about to punch her window out when her mother appeared behind it with a trolley laden with shopping bags. Caron's angst dissapeared magically with the sight of her sheepish mother and she realised this purgatorial wait was finally over.


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