dead mans killer

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Thrillers  |  House: Booksie Classic

a dead mans perspective of grave robbers and the world but with a twist

Humans, the definition of a human is a despicable, corrupted being that is rotted to the bone. Every human is corrupted no one is pure. The only pure people are either people without the seven deadly sins or the people like me who \"punish\" the corrupted. We clean away all the rottenness of their heart. After the \"punishment\" they are pure and they do not think rotten thoughts again... Humans are not loyal they only know how to betray. Once you gain their trust they will betray you in the most hurtful way possible. They will take our heart and break it. Shattering it into a million pieces. They will rip out your inside and tear them into as many pieces as they can. Watching your despicable face tear up, watching you cry. Humans will laugh as soon as you show weakness. Humans are disgusting, they are creatures that don’t know their own limits by the time they stop your already in the ground. With maggots coming out of your eyes and mouth and worms going inside your nose. You lay in the ground all alone. Trapped in your cage of loneliness; then you hear a noise, what's going on? The cage begins to move then someone opens your coffin. You can feel their breath but you cannot see them because your eyes are closed. You feel someone opening your eyes. A man is standing over me, and he looks very familiar, but I can’t remember where I have seen him. He’s standing over me and his putrid smelling breath is breathing into my face. You see his decayed teeth dyed yellow. His eyes were red but his iris was as blue as the ocean. His ears sagged low while his hair was chopped off short. He looked so familiar, where have I seen him? He reaches for your eye and rips out the decaying part of it. You see your eye flop, and the man tosses it inside of a bucket. What is he doing with you? You feel like you should be scared but you feel nothing. You are dead. You do not exist anymore. Nobody can still love you if you do not exist. You do not give love nor will you receive any. The man smiles widely at your, he takes out a large scalpel. Hmm, you wonder what he is going to do to you. He places the sharp blade against your chest and cuts deeply into the skin. He continues to cut but no blood runs out of you, it is all dried up. He reaches his hands into your insides, savagely splashing your organs around. He takes hold of something, its round with a small tube running down your body. It’s very soft and seems like that if you ate it would be a bit chewy..... He begins to rip it out of you. Oh it’s just your stomach. The man takes the knife and begins to cut out your stomach and throws it on the ground. The man takes the scalpel again and cuts down your thigh exposing your femur bone, and yet again no blood flows out. He walks over to a small table; I can see that he was looking for something specific; some kind of tool maybe? Then I saw it. A large metal object, an electric saw. He was clutching the handle of the saw tightly. Beads of sweat ran down his face and down his arm. His finger flipped a switch and the small round circular device began to move. The sharp edges of the saw rotated too fast for the human eye to see. He looked at me. His cold gaze sent shivers down my rotten spine. His blue eyes were as cold as ice. As if they had felt heart break. He took the saw and moved it closer to me...... what was he going to do? He placed the saw against the femur bone in my thigh and began to push it harder and harder against it. The saw shrieked and sounded like a small child screaming from getting their joints ripped off of them slowly. I watched the saw slowly run through my bone. I knew I should have felt the pain but I did not feel anything anymore. The saw finally went all the way through the bone and it cracked. He began on the other side trying to finish it quickly. He sawed the bone all the way through then firmly grabbed the bone. He began to yank on it very hard and it cracked out. He continued to take out bones and organs. Then he put me back in my coffin then threw the coffin into the back of his trunk. He drove back to the cemetery and grabbed my coffin to put it back in the ground. He looked at me with absolute disgust and he looked like he had just gotten revenge.... he closed the coffin and buried me again. I remember where I had seen him! I killed his family and I was ripping out there organs and some of their bones I cracked out of their body. Their screams of pain were amazing to hear. Now that I think about it he only took the organs and bones that I had ripped out of his family. He must have wanted me to feel the same pain as his family felt, but by the time he decided to take revenge it was too late. I was already dead because another man had come by and bashed my skull in. I had also killed that man’s family? Yeah I did..... That was also allot of fun, but why would they want revenge? It was harder for me. I had to purify them. After all both of their wife’s had my children and told their husbands that they would never cheat. I had to purify the cheaters and the children of the cheaters. I killed the women that had cheated on their husbands with me, and I also killed the children that were bon form that affair! Now imp back in my cage of emptiness feeling even emptier, and now i can’t rid the world of the impure. I am the only one who is pure.... even though I am locked in my cage I will find a way to rid this world of the impure. I will get rid of them even if I am in my grave. I will never stop until everyone is pure.


Submitted: December 30, 2009

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darkman1408

well that went downhill. lol not ur writing, it was great but the overall mood took a u-turn to hell. goddamn humans

Wed, December 30th, 2009 2:28pm

mommy3

Okay this was good. I only noticed some errors with spelling also some sentences need to be capitalized. I would also look over this sentence. I think it might sound better as Then I saw a large metal object could it be an electric saw. Who knows? Of course your way sounds fine too. I enjoyed reading this. Might want to use the spellchecker. What do you use when you type? For example do you have a Microsoft Word program. Not trying to be a pest just trying to help you out. Good luck and have a Happy New Year. :D

Wed, December 30th, 2009 6:47pm

callisto23

mommy3 thankyou so much i really apprciate your help and i did not use anything to check for spelling. i just typed it on here which unfortunately does not have spell checking. and i am going to change that sentence i think that your way is better i never thought of that :D im going to start typing using microsoft but it was just the first few times i typed it on here. thank you for your advice and if you dont mind i would like for you to continue reading my short stories and heping me with them your advice is very helpful thank you again so much! happy new years and have a good day! chow for now! :D

Wed, December 30th, 2009 7:59pm

xxxGirlNextDoorxx

oh my gosh! good thing I'm an alien, right? heehee.
But this was so depressing, & cool...
Even though this was the most disgusting thing I have ever read, it was also the most riveting.
please keep writing!

Wed, December 30th, 2009 9:24pm

reverie

O____________O that was... well, creepy =))
ha ha! it sort of reminded me of Light Yagami - 'Kira' from Death Note. The whole 'rid the world of these impure souls' things... =))
anyhow, good work and write on!

Thu, December 31st, 2009 1:08am

daytona9683

This is amazing just like the other one almost better i did notice like 2 spelling errors but im not good with that so dont ask me and please keep me updated if you choose to write more

Thu, December 31st, 2009 6:04am

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haha thanks for another awesome comment. and ill be sure to fix those spelling errors. actually i never edited this story -.- the results show -.-'. and i will definetly keep you posted i am probably going to write moreto the novel "machine world" just gotta get some inspiration and im there :D

Wed, December 30th, 2009 10:18pm

Azaleas secrets

i loved the detail here and "the snake swallowing its own tail" plot. At the beginning he felt like a helpless victim but then he turns out to be the real psycho with no regrets or remorse.

he took his disillusionment with humanity to insanity, murder and unspeakable tortures. Your story arouses real disgust against such charachter. It is also a bitter satire on people who think they become the custodians of righteousness by killing others in the name of purifying them.

if we put this story in a larger context, it is really something excellent and rare. it also speaks the inadequacy of revenge and punishment (in nutshell:justice) after the cruel deed is done.

Sun, January 17th, 2010 11:00am

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haha thanks again. this story is my favorite probably just because whenever i thought of this i actually thought of the movie saw 4 so whenever i need to think gory i think 'hmm what would the people who write the saw movies do?' thats the result. i actually want to get this story published in a newspaper or something, anything! just as long as my story gets out there, i also want to publish love is hate. i love your comments and they help allot. thank you and chow for now! :D

Sun, January 17th, 2010 3:10am

Azaleas secrets

dont mind the typing errors... i'll try to be careful next time.

Sun, January 17th, 2010 11:01am

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