"Bleeding Hearts"

viper

That's really cool.I liked the rhyming.It's a little sad.Wanting someone who is with someone else and being afraid to express how you truly feel to them.Great job on this.Keep it up.

StevenJAdelmund

Isn't it great to pour your blackened heart out in verse? Well done! Worth the read.

wolffe

very lyrical as usual. Good stress on the syllables. Thanks for the invite.

SnowQueen

Very well written. Well done. :) I like the rhyming, too.

-SnowQueen

jerkulez

An enjoyable read indeed!
looking forward to more of your stuff.

feel free to drop by my stuff and comment ;)

Manyfacets

Hmmmm, an interesting little piece of work.
I'm not certain if this is your heart, or is it
your best friend drooling over your girl/wife?

Nice work I love rhyming, keep going.
Kind Regards

SomeoneCrazy

Splended Job!! I love it! Keep up the Awesome work!! :D

EdwardJBradleySr

CanadianIdiot:

Well written and expressed emotions. Of unrequited love and continued longing for a loved one. Gave it an "I Like It" vote.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Paulo Francisco

I am kind of dense about poetry myself, but this poem really makes sense to me. It expresses so much emotion, and it seems to say, even though it seemes inpossible it could happen. Simply brilliant.

native2music

I really liked in this poem that you will be you, and you change for no one.
"I won’t impress you,
I’ll do what I do,"

I don't even know if you wrote this as first person point of view or from someone else's point of view, but here's my thoughts -

I love the 2nd verse:

"feel pathetic,
Shameful and magnetic,
To pity all and doubt,
And watch you walk about"

That is the worse feeling ever. When you like someone so much, but at the same time you are trying to not be clingy and magnetic. Truly, the last thing we would want from that admired person is pity.

I actually had to go above and look at the other comments people left and also at your responses to see if you wrote it as your own point of view. *Sigh*... dude... I'll try not to give much advice, but honestly if the girl ain't into you like that, don't waste time on her. Look at it this way - you're better off without her. (Maybe not without her, but better off not being in that kind of relationship with her.) When the right one comes along, you will both fit together as if a puzzle piece has been missing and suddenly found. I think there will be no question on either side when it's your soul mate (if you believe in that kind of stuff).

Either way... I enjoyed reading this. I hope that if this situation is still bringing you down, that you can move on quickly... go out... have fun... flirt... rock out with your cock out ;)

hahaha that was so wrong. I shouldn't have wrote that, but oh well... you get my drift... enjoy life!

CrazyGurl01

i like that..... very much like what i feel when someone wants me to change and i like it just how i am. its refreshing to know someone can write about the same things i feel.

Gift Of Noni

Canadian,

feelings... whoa whoa whoa... feelings........

Hmmm????

I like the way your poem says it better.

Nice Job

Susan Hartline Fouts

That was such a beautiful poem. It expressed your feelings so exquisitely. So sad but so beautiful.

Nomurcee187

Excellent!! I was very moved by this poem as though you were directing your feelings and thoughts toward me! Quite an accomplishment--I am impressed! Now I am speechless ¥¿¥

Vampire Princces

woah great piece of work trully filled with emotions i loved it keep on it

neji chan

That was such a good poem. ASlso, I'd like to thank you for making your poems (well, the ones I've read so far) a little on the "dark side". All of that happy sunshine crap was getting on my nerves.