Short Story on Courage: Victim or Fighter by Carlos Salinas

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Flash Fiction  |  House: Booksie Classic

A short dialogue on courage.

 

His head hung low. He felt defeat. He felt completely useless.

The old man spoke first, “What are you going to do?”

He sat there staring at the ground. “What can I do?” he finally uttered.

“You have 2 choices: be a victim or be a fighter. Which one do you want to be?”


Submitted: September 23, 2012

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Archia

What I really like is how he doesn't give the next answer; the question is left hanging there. It says a lot in it for such a short piece, and it's really good.

Sat, September 29th, 2012 8:47am

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Thank you! That was EXACTLY my goal! I have gotten feedback saying that it should have had more character development, more or a setting -but that was the idea, just to have the essentials. That way, it can be anyone and anywhere. Thanks again for the comment! :)

Sat, September 29th, 2012 8:07am

SLaRose

I really like this dialogue. it has me picturing a couple different scenarios in which it could be used and has me going off on what they could possibly be talking about. he could have been defeated or felt defeated in so many different aspects of life or just in one aspect. there's hundreds of possibilities. and while i love that idea i also feel for that reason maybe you could recreate this in another work and use it in a full story. show us what you envision and tell us the story that you want. It's just what i think but other than that i think its a great little snippet of what could be a great story.

Wed, November 7th, 2012 2:20pm

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Thanks for the feedback, I had been kicking this convo in my head for a while. I really liked the idea of leaving it open fro intervention. I think people will fill it in with whatever is on their mind: relationships, jobs, family, dreams, anger, problems, etc. I wanted it to be used for self-reflection for the reader. Thanks for reading!

Wed, November 7th, 2012 7:04am

r futrell

Short, sweet and to the point. I like it. You can go anywhere with this, or it's great as it is. Nice.

Sun, October 14th, 2018 12:10pm

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