Summer Night's Breeze

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okay...i walked into my sunroom with huge open windows and the breeze blew through my hair, and, uh...i thought of this...

The cool, summer night’s breeze,

Rushes through the open window.

It sweeps in around me,

Whispering through my hair

And tickling my skin

The cold night’s air, is, in itself, warmth

As a memory far in the distance,

Threatens to break free.

Of a night like tonight,

When the summer night’s breeze blew through my hair

And I was all alone,

And it was dark,

And it was cold,

And it was bone chillingly

Perfect.

Submitted: August 08, 2008

Poetry air cold fun skin summer nights tags breeze hair chill bone

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Kshitij Sharma

Nice. I can almost feel the shiver down my spine :-)

Fri, August 8th, 2008 9:13am

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:) sweet! I was just going to go ask you to read this...thanks!

Fri, August 8th, 2008 2:22am

Balaji Iyer

Careless verses... keep it up... the night surely spins myriad images and conjures up imagination not know before...

Sun, August 10th, 2008 4:39am

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thanks.

Sat, August 9th, 2008 10:33pm

Vehement Emotions

moments of solitude
can be one of the best experiences
beautiful
vivid clear words

Mon, August 11th, 2008 4:35pm

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:) thank you

Mon, August 11th, 2008 11:55am

donkylemore

Are you living in trepidation of this memory; and is it the ambiance of the night which helps you keep that memory at bay..
Is that what makes it chillingly perfect.
I don't mean to be mean spirited about the poem.
Its just that its not as clear to me as it is obviously is to the many commentators above .
The wording is tender and beautiful.. and the piece is undoubtedlly well constructed
But forgive me but the point eludes me.

Fri, August 15th, 2008 2:25pm

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well, the cold breeze creates a bit of an eerie feeling--raising goosebumps, and such...the memory is warm, and perfect, and happy. The "bone chillingly" is just the cold breeze that makes me so happy and content...if that makes sense...it's kind of hard to explain.
Thanks, anyway:)

Fri, August 15th, 2008 12:04pm

DiscoveredDream

Nice Catherine, You give a strong point in what your feeling and I adore that. You had me zoned out on the beautiful days for quite a bit. I like to re read poems so I know what that person was feeling but I didn't have to re read this one. It came simple and original.

Good Work

Mon, August 18th, 2008 2:36am

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:) Thank you!

Sun, August 17th, 2008 7:46pm

VictoriaDawn

hmmm i liked this....very good :)

if you like vampire novels....would you mind reading mine and letting me know what you think?

Tue, August 26th, 2008 10:58pm

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thanks!
i'll be sure to read yours:)

Tue, August 26th, 2008 4:12pm

blaze14

This was clearly said... i could almost feel the persona emotion nice!!! keep it up

Tue, September 2nd, 2008 7:18pm

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:D Thank you!

Tue, September 2nd, 2008 4:20pm

Copperhorse

This is the second poem I've read of yours. The first was "Mama, Mama". Poetry is so subjective.

I wonder if you substituted the word "caressing" in place of "tickling" in the first stanza. For me, the "s" sound fits a bit better with the other word choices used. Also, I don't associate whispers with tickling. However, I do know lots of people mix the two just fine. --big grin--

Please understand, I still enjoyed your piece as it was written.

Wed, September 3rd, 2008 4:06pm

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:D Thanks! I'll have to go over it again and see if "caressing" would work better. Thanks so much for the tip!

Wed, September 3rd, 2008 1:57pm

dreaming of you

i did enjoy this poem . very seductive , i almost sent my mate vincent the vampire over to say hello

Thu, September 18th, 2008 8:54am

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thanks! I'm glad you liked it! :D

Thu, September 18th, 2008 1:36pm