This is just about night. It's not very good, but i figured i'd post it and see what response i got.

The night
Sky as dark as pitch
It swallows me
Fighting the urge to scream with fright
It swallows me
Running in circles, searching for light
It swallows me
Hearing noises so close by
It swallows me
I am scared out of my mind
It swallows me
But when day breaks though, I should be relieved
I soak up all the sun
For sun is light, and happiness
In a world where there is none
As the day grows old
And dusk arrives
I think of all the lives
That ended today
And will end tonight
Because the sun did not stay
Again I stand here in the night
With sky, dark as pitch
It swallows me again, as it did, not so long before
I no longer feel the urge to scream
I stay in one place
It continues to swallow me
I still hear noises, but I don’t mind
I am no longer frightened
For night is day without the light
Without the sky so brightened

Submitted: June 22, 2008

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this is actually good.. i like the imagery you used and the flow was well executed.. word usage was okay, it was easy to understand what the poem was expressing.. good job!! =)

Sun, June 22nd, 2008 6:09am



Sat, June 21st, 2008 11:36pm

Kisha Telford

i really like this. i especially like the first stanza and repeating the line it swallows me. very nice. ^_^

Fri, July 11th, 2008 3:17am


cool:) Thanks!

Thu, July 10th, 2008 10:00pm

Kshitij Sharma

Who says it's not good. I loved the "It swallows me" scheme. Very clever!

Rocking stuff!

Mon, August 18th, 2008 9:39am


=D Thank you, thank you, thank you!

Mon, August 18th, 2008 8:41am


it's not bad, especially the "it swallows me it swallows me it swallows me" made me read it more than twice.

Wed, November 25th, 2009 5:03am

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