Two boys must face the consequences of not obeying their mother.

 

Peter and Paul were two brothers.

You never saw one without the other

and they would not obey their mother

or their father or their nurse.

They were not a blessing, they were a curse.

They would not be quiet or still.

They made mischief all day and would play

where they were not supposed to play.

They were not obedient in any way.

One day

they were playing when it grew late

and their mother called for them

and told them to come to their beds,

but Peter and Paul would not listen to her

and refused to do what she said.

Their mother told them that if they did not do it,

the forest giant would come in the night and chop off their heads.

Peter and Paul still refused to do what they were told

and they would not come to their beds.

When their mother went outside in the morning,

she saw their bodies, bereft of the heads.

 

 

 


Submitted: October 28, 2021

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Criss Sole

Yikes!
Let that be a lesson to all those misbehaving kids!
Great poem.

Tue, February 8th, 2022 5:45am

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Thank you so much Criss!

Tue, February 8th, 2022 11:58am

Mike S.

See kids? Always listen to your parents; a fine poem charlamaye

Wed, March 16th, 2022 10:05pm

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Thank you so much Mike

Wed, March 16th, 2022 6:16pm

DLCannon

perfect campfire story for a family camp-out. L.O.L.

Mon, March 28th, 2022 4:00am

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Thank you so much

Mon, March 28th, 2022 1:16pm

charlamaye

Thank you so much

Mon, March 28th, 2022 5:06pm

Jezzy Jay

A good poem, a few lines could do with a bit of work but then again no poetry is ever perfect, so maybe you don't need to fix a thing.

As for the tone it sets....... Yeaaa that is one scary piece, I wouldn't even wanna go hang out in the woods hahaha

Thu, April 7th, 2022 11:02pm

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Thank you

Thu, April 7th, 2022 4:52pm

En Raiter

I dug the message in the poem, but it confused me that she didn't ensure they were in bed and found them in the morning..

Dark thought.... was there really a forest giant or....?

Wed, April 13th, 2022 2:14am

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They weren't in bed in the morning they were dead in the morning dead not bad

Wed, April 13th, 2022 9:19am

En Raiter

I was suggesting she snapped and did it herself.

Wed, April 13th, 2022 5:22pm

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I can see why you would think that but no although there is sometimes something that I do in my writing I do make the parents that cruel sometimes but not this time

Wed, April 13th, 2022 6:29pm

D. Thurmond / JEF

Well, after reading this, I am very glad I was an obedient child. :)

Wed, April 13th, 2022 9:14pm

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I bet you are try reading this to your little ones if they misbehave

Wed, April 13th, 2022 6:28pm

Juli Monat

I like it, reminds me of me and my brothers. Good poem.

Thu, April 14th, 2022 2:49am

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your welcome glad you it brought back some memories

Thu, April 14th, 2022 2:14pm

anand bose

Beautiful

Sun, April 17th, 2022 1:22am

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thx

Sun, April 17th, 2022 7:20pm

mari' emeraude

Moral to the story: come in when you're told to ;)

Wed, April 20th, 2022 1:20am

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yes

Wed, April 20th, 2022 10:58am

l reis

This is good, Charlamaye. It makes me think of a panel I used to read in a magazine called Highlights. Goofus and Gallant. Give me a grim ending, and I'm happy.

Thu, April 21st, 2022 4:40am

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thank you so much

Thu, April 21st, 2022 11:30am

l.f. shelly

Amazing poem

Sun, May 1st, 2022 10:48pm

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Thank you

Sun, May 1st, 2022 4:19pm

harshita8888

Oh ! I wish they would get another punishment instead of this . Sad ending . Btw nice poem ????

Fri, May 6th, 2022 1:50am

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I'm glad that you feel for them thank you i

Thu, May 5th, 2022 7:45pm

shika

Whoa! Never expected that ending. The poem describes the mischief mothers have to deal from their kids very well and the common myths they make use of to make their kids obey. It also portrays how mothers only look out for their kids, which if the kids don't listen to then they'll end up in danger. Wonderful work!

Wed, May 18th, 2022 5:27am

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thank you very very very much it means A LOT thank you

Wed, May 18th, 2022 11:10am

tom mcmullen

Scary Charlie!

Sat, May 21st, 2022 7:59am

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Imagine being Peter and Paul

Sat, May 21st, 2022 5:41pm

Bluebird1203

Wow. I wasn't expecting it to end like that????

Tue, May 24th, 2022 5:21am

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that's just transfers i thank you for your comment that means lot

Tue, May 24th, 2022 11:14am

Bluebird1203

Ignore those question marks. They were supposed to be an emoji.

Tue, May 24th, 2022 5:23am

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Thank you

Tue, May 24th, 2022 11:16am

Criss Sole

Yikes! Well... let that be a lesson to all those misbehaving kids!
Great rhyming. I really enjoyed this one.

Sat, June 4th, 2022 10:10am

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I'm glad you did

Sat, June 4th, 2022 8:03pm

pratanubanerjee

This is really great.. good morning friend.

Tue, June 14th, 2022 4:03am

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Thank you good evening friend

Tue, June 14th, 2022 4:11pm

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