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Recent Comments
You have a good grasp of describing your fictional world. It's not hard for me to picture Auros on the mountain, and suddenly waking up in his bed, thinking it's all a dream. However, there are some grammar errors here. Mostly just a confusion between how to use an apostrophe to show possession, and how to make a word plural. I liked that you've mined history for your idea. It really gives the story a believable ground. Calling him the "Lord of Light" is a bit too similar to this popular show called "Game of Thrones". If you wanted to take this further you would have to change that terminology.
Thank you for the review. I appreciate it, but I'm keeping it all. Minor grammatical errors will be corrected of course. Thanks again. And the "Light" and "Dark" terms assist the racial division theme within the story and serve a deeper purpose as the story goes on.
I just binge read chapters 3 - 6 and I absolutely love them. Shade is becoming a beast. Umbris is funny and for some reason I don't trust Luma lol. But I can't wait to read what's next !!!
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Great work so far.
Interesting concept with good action.
You are skilled writer with a vivid imagination.
Shade is an interesting hero.
Looking forward to the other chapters.
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I'm liking shade more than I thought I would.....lol hard to believe since I came up with him......but I never expected to think about him as a real life person......this is definitely more than expected and congrats on once again leaving me shocked.......can't wait for the next chapter, this one is currently my most fav
I am officially hooked!
Oh...and the plot thickens!
So much for such a young boy! Very compelling read! I will definitely continue!!!
Excellent start. I am drawn in and can't wait to read chapter two.
Oh my! I'm adding this to my reading list!
Very interesting chapter. I like the world you are creating and the mythos. Watch your verb tenses. You jump back and forth between past and present. I'd also recommend that you show more of the world through your characters. But the story looks epic!
Thanks for the review :) . The story is being told to someone, the italic portions are the narrator and are told in present tense for that affect. And Arderon isn't done being explored, not even 5% lol, much more to come! Thanks again, I appreciate it!
Wow this chapter is wild dark and I love it!!! There were a few typos in the chapter, but overall it's my favorite chapter so far!!
You know I like the nickname remy lol....but cuzzo this chapter tell so much about his character it's not even funny. And the gore that he witnessed will forever haunt him....can't wait for the next chapter
Oh and also, Ismael seems suspect to me lol. Just saying.
Wow, I impressed with this story. And I like Shade already. Feel bad for his mom.
Holy crap !!! I thought Endangered was good, your a good author. Guess I'll be reading this one too. Really like it
Looking forward to it cuzzo
The first chapter was more than I expected, I can't wait to read the following chapters. ???????????????????????? I'm ready to find more situations for Shade to overcome.
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