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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

One from the darker side of my soul. Not many laughs here.

Even on my brightest day

I hit the deepest deep

I'm overcome with sadness

I'm overwhelmed by grief

 

And maybe it's just chemicals

Unbalanced in my blood

That turn my weather overcast

That cause my tears to flood

 

Or maybe it's just faith in God

Or vitamins I lack

Or maybe it's because you're gone

And never coming back

 


Submitted: April 10, 2012

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Wilbur

what to say. sung on a single sorrowing note. soundings for a ship riding a dark sea.
sorry, connie

Tue, April 10th, 2012 3:48pm

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I still haven't responded to your poems - I think the last couple of posts I've put up may give a clue as to where they sent me, but I still intend to respond to you properly. Thanks for following my posts, and liking them! I'm starting to worry about you, Connie. And why do you say 'sorry'?

Tue, April 10th, 2012 1:45pm

BethanGray

This is so sad that it's beautiful. The kind of writing that inspires.

Tue, April 10th, 2012 9:54pm

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Thank you, Bethan. Your opinion means a lot to me.

Thu, April 12th, 2012 3:23am

Insane Membrane

oh very lovely Mr G ...

Wed, April 11th, 2012 4:22pm

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I knew you'd have a sensitive side - even if you are Australian.

Thu, April 12th, 2012 2:31am

SPURIOUS

This was lovely. I like the way you can turn something sad into something beautiful, yet still allowing the message to come across. It expresses the emotion very well. Thumbs up :) Keep up your great work.

Sat, April 14th, 2012 2:55am

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Thank you so much, not just for reading, but for giving such a thoughtful response. Very much appreciated.

Sat, April 14th, 2012 5:18pm

inspiredbylove22

On re-reading this several times, still makes me take a deep beath to hold back a little tear. I think this poem is possibly the most wonderful thing I have read in a long time Chris, nothing else has honestly stirred such emotion in me. Missing a loved one everyday is indeed the most difficult thing to do. Thank you so much for saying yes to my 'borrowing' your words, even though they were meant for someone else. :) I'm so glad I found your wonderful pieces of work. (In return, I'll let you into a little secret...Gemma)

Sat, April 14th, 2012 9:13am

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I'm very moved that you were so touched by the words I borrowed and rearranged in this manner. Kind of sad as well, because I much prefer to make people laugh, but it's good to share the sadness. Some pain can only be eased by time, but sometimes to know others feel the same way, can help a little. I also think people somehow live on in our sadness - I know I sometimes welcome the pain, because it's the only way of being touched, physically, by someone who's gone. Thanks Gemma, and I promise I won't tell anyone your name...DOH!

Thu, April 19th, 2012 1:46am

meriddle

Again, this poem reminds me of me, on a good day. I believe the most creative work comes from pain. Sometimes, the expression of personal pain releases it and leads to a higher order of creativity. Your style is improving. I enjoyed this poem. M1ke

Sat, April 14th, 2012 3:13pm

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Thanks Mike. This reminds you of you on a GOOD day? I thought you were leaving the darkness behind?

Sat, April 14th, 2012 3:25pm

optimysticynic

plaintive, simple, wistful and oh so sad. I do hope this does not come from a real place. concise, powerful stanzas, really well written.

Sun, April 15th, 2012 5:26am

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Thank you, Sara. I don't think I could make anything resonate if it didn't come from a real place, but like a lot of your work shows, there's no light without dark, and life is definitely bittersweet. I'm glad I survived long enough to realise how wonderful it can be, and to learn how to live in the moment.

Sun, April 15th, 2012 7:35am

Irwinagain

Good form, soundly constructed, without any padding. I like it!

Tue, April 17th, 2012 1:46pm

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Cheers Irwin, but what about my 'Granddad's little accident'? I guarantee it will shake your beliefs to the core!

Wed, April 18th, 2012 6:57am

BITSxOFxKINKY

oh so sad, a deep sigh of poetry

Wed, April 18th, 2012 5:26pm

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Perfectly put, thank you so much.

Wed, April 18th, 2012 2:17pm

brucek

very nicely done. right to the point. i vote for the missing one.

Sat, April 21st, 2012 10:54am

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Thanks friend. I think you may be right.

Mon, April 23rd, 2012 3:51am

Nichola Palermo

It was lovely to read. It touched my heart
it touched my soul, sad words but so sincere.

Tue, April 24th, 2012 7:50pm

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Thanks Nichola. I worry about putting personal, sad poems on, but I think we sometimes need reminding that we're not alone in our pain, so hopefully it does some good. I'd still rather make you laugh though. :O)

Fri, April 27th, 2012 3:38am

Desilu

Your words have touched my heart.

Thu, April 26th, 2012 3:48pm

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And yours have touched mine. Thank you. :O)

Thu, May 3rd, 2012 1:43am

towers of academe

Good stuff. It needn't be biographical to put down how someone feels at a hard time. I won't try and read between the lines. Nicely put, some things that get us down.

Fri, May 11th, 2012 10:48pm

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