The Lonely Warrior

Weiss

Woah.... Nice dude *-* !!!! :P
10 out of 10 XP :P

L.K. LilLoCksea

How you come up with these amazing poems...I dono...
Very heartfelt and personal poem, I really like it!
Honest and true to oneself...
Now I think if more people were like this, minding there own business- the world may know peace...

Yours
L.K.

Keke Serene

It really does suck that the people who are most true to themselves are often outcasts. I really liked the way you related his past and his actions, how you justified why he is the way he is, how he's better because of it.
"There is envy... what struggle is this?" Is my favorite line! It's laughable, I think. Kind of. Hear me out! So he's being true to himself and people are angry because he's not fake like they are, so it's like what the heck? So yeah, maybe kt was the word struggle, idk. I just really like that line. I think the line could also work as "there is struggle...what envy is this?" Thats kind of random, by a suggestion or anything, just something stupid I wanted to point out I guess hah. But well done! Lonely indeed is the path of the noble, and this says so in a very eloquent way. Nicely done :)

Jeff Bezaire

I connect with this so deeply.
It seems pointless at times, stupid or careless or silly at other times to walk against the surging mob of billions who shuffle in the same direction, too afraid to be anything other than one of the flock. But choosing to be an individual who is not swayed by public opinion or the popular "in-thing" is worth the daily struggle, the criticism and lack of understanding from others. There are so many who see and understand what you are doing and wish they had the strength to do the same, and that's what makes the journey of the lonely warrior worth it - we are stronger in mind and spirit. Our resolve is incalculable, our courage unending. We have the means to build within ourselves what is lacking, whereas the flock chooses to lay down and give up or wait for someone to come around with the solution to their problem.
To be your own voice, to be your own mind, to distinguish yourself in the world as an individual, free-thinking person is worth the struggle.
We physically and mentally roam, exploring places of the world and of our mind many do not realize exist. We are always looking and thinking beyond what is in front of us.
Silent contemplation is not a past time or a hobby, it's not a fun thing to do when we have the time; it's our way of life. Vomiting up words does not make one wiser, but people don't understand that; they're too busy vomiting up words.
This is a fantastic piece of art. From the soul to the soul.

M.H. Parabola

You have a fantastic grasp of rhythm which is very important in a poem structured this way. It flows with every beat, almost like a song. You can feel every emphasized work hit, STRIKE, and I really enjoyed that. I can also feel the loneliness, and I relate to it. For years I wandered alone, I usually described it as running. I stayed an outcast because it was safe, and the choice to roam and travel was... freeing. It's romantic and tragic, very beautiful! Again, I love those beats though at the end of each sentence, it's like they're being driven like a hammer to nails and it makes it all the more powerful.

zanybelle

The lone warrior - a force to be reckoned with and yet a life of silent sadness. You paint his journey with your words so vividly. He is true to himself and makes his own destiny whatever the cost he will always be honourable. Loved it! Great work ans thanks for sharing. ZB.

Fantasy lady

You are blessed with such a talent of expression..its amazing. I wish I could describe myself in a way as poetic as you. While my words often doom my expression. Hope to enjoy more of your poems. I have become a sincere fan :-)