The Break: The Time, The Heal, The Dream

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

The Break: The Time, The Heal, The Dream

I was
young, but not quite naïve
I was
five when The Message came:
my
Mommy And Daddy,
a package no more
a Break
that will Never fix
But, Heal
in Time
The Break
will Never Fix
But, Heal
In Time
Time came
and
Time passed
With every tick
the Break progressed
to healed
With every tickity
The Break halted
in fear
With every tock
The Break leaped
Like a liger, backwards
Tick! Tick! Tickity, Tock!
Tick! Tick! Tickity, Tock!
The Break
will Never Fix
But, Heal
in time
I am
Older now, lessons learned
Only thirteen when received a dream:
my
Mommy and Daddy
still not a package, yet Comfort and Harmony
The Break
didn’t fix
But, healed
in time
That time came
That time passed
some still needed,
But all the same
all is swell
just live well
just
Live
Cause here’s the dream
Comfort
Harmony
= = = = = =
Healed
But
Not
Fixed


Submitted: April 25, 2011

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McKenna Rose

I like it! It tells a full story through a poem.
~McKenna Rose

Wed, May 18th, 2011 1:20am

Author
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AWE THANKs. Ia m so glad you like this piece and thank you so much for reading. :)

Wed, May 18th, 2011 6:41am

dwtice

I have to agree with previous post...it is very vivid description of what is happening around and inside of yu.

Thu, May 19th, 2011 5:06am

Author
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Thanks so much. :) -CJam

Thu, May 19th, 2011 5:27am

JustinSF

I liked it too, but seemed a bit choppy ( maybe it's just how I'm reading it)

Wed, June 8th, 2011 6:19am

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It must be the way that you are reading it because the line breaks aren't always about reading but rather how it looks (except I don't think about it I "feel" it (that probably doesn't make sense unless you are a serious artist-not that i am saying your not) I'd to put audio of me reading m work up but whatever I use doesn't hear my voice for some reason. I am glad you liked it. Thank you for taking time to read my work. I will make it a point to read yours. -CJam

Wed, June 8th, 2011 1:02pm

Nocturnal Writer

Awsome poem I loved it fantastic work, it's like a short story in poem form. Well done you.
Strengths
- flow
- wording
- well written
- no spelling errors
- Fantastic title and theme
Weaknesses - again there are none this poem was brilliant! You now have a new fan! :D

Fri, June 24th, 2011 4:11pm

Author
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Thank you so much! I love new fans (and old fans too). I will most certainly read your work. Thanks for taking time to read, Moonlit Syndicate.

Sun, June 26th, 2011 7:17am

emogurl123

I love it. Love how you set it up as well.

Sat, August 20th, 2011 9:26am

Author
Reply

Thanks. I did aim for a certain structure and it is nice to hear I succeeded. =)
I appreciate that you took your time to read and comment. Thank you. I will read your work, for sure, if I haven't already.
-CJam

Sat, August 20th, 2011 10:35am

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