What's going on here

I saw your freedom,

it was a disgraceful,

but the free poeoel had there changed of pace, they couldn't handle the new

But yiu gotta have friends taht get ya all fucked up

But tagt jsut the contagion of hell

I saw nothing but pe pressure indulging the real not the fabrication to run

No war, is funny but to see war yiu said least I wa the fisrt to die

When the genvioua convention worked

It wasn't war I was a kid once to burn them all to hell

This ain't funny

So much is gone wrong

But life is a ball

When you can have fun

Keep your head in your freedom's

But start it again

I shoot yiu down and all yoir friends

Submitted: August 06, 2022

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olive tree

Hell yeah that's popping more than usual boy, keep it comin

Sat, August 6th, 2022 10:47pm


Sweet I have one in the horror house, sinister the third!

Sat, August 6th, 2022 8:41pm

olive tree


i noticed you are typing better. whatever you're doing to do that, focus on it, cus you have brilliant ideas but it's very hard to follow with the grammar sometimes.
I can read very fast. It's fun piecing the puzzle together, but I too grow impatient... plus I think it would dramatically increase the reach of your work if you simply started doing what you were doing before, putting it through a word processor, it came out surprisingly legible if I recall correctly

good on ya collective,
Keep it up


Sun, August 7th, 2022 4:14am


Hospital man I had to race, my thoughts weren't going ro do everyhing and then I just gave up, I should do more, but I see it, maybe when I get a mic I'll do voices overs a well

Sat, August 6th, 2022 9:32pm

olive tree

sounds good mate. im trying to do videos now too. will take a few years to find my niche, but it was like that for writing, and im done with writing now, I feel free, love ya collective, fly ya bird, i know you see higher than the sky, as do I

Sun, August 7th, 2022 10:07am


Temptation, dwelling in all iighte but to start aay from waht yiu learn, can be understood by tommrow, think deaper in there rarities to see what they had thinking of tommrow, I like a sweet suprise, that's allways almost teh same delivered by an expert, but to reflect on what non fiction or fiction is your mind, relaty bites

Sun, August 7th, 2022 3:12am

olive tree

Excellent rebuttal, collective. Genuinely. I see past the grammar. I see you, man.

mark twain - "why shouldn't truth be stranger than fiction? Fiction has to make sense, after all."

Sun, August 7th, 2022 10:22am

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