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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

A poem about musical instruments.

A stick of wood

a piece of plastic

hitting its head

until it is spastic


A symbol clang

a beat  does follow

a sacrifice today

forgotten tomorrow


Skin stretched tight

beaten again

a torture device

a beautiful sin


A melody of death so sweet

a lullaby so soothing

they fall off their feet

a fate to meet


A sundown day

a new direction

a sound of pain

clapping reflection


An echo in the future

a whisper in the past

a joyful noise in this moment

goes by too fast


Copyright Trevor Stripling


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Submitted: November 13, 2014

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I like music a lot, and I think you did well describing the instruments in a unique style! I think the rhythm is really good and easy to read. The rhyming is perfect! Now, I'm guessing that 'A sundown day in a new direction' is metaphoric for the musical notes changing direction, like up or down, and clapping reflection probably for symmetrical notes in the instrument. It is a good metaphor. My favorite part is 'an echo in the future, a whisper in the past'; I like the way it was worded. I loved reading the entire poem, Comgree! Thanks for posting it. I give this poem a like!

Thu, November 13th, 2014 10:48pm


Thank you for reading it.

Thu, November 13th, 2014 2:49pm


This is so descriptive and deep! I like its uniqueness, how the piece revolves around the different musical instruments. You've used awesome metaphors, especially in the last lines. Keep up the good work! :)

Fri, November 14th, 2014 8:47pm


Thanks, I am glad you enjoyed it.

Fri, November 14th, 2014 1:36pm

Amy Furzane

I like this one. The rhyming was good. The third stanza sounded deep. Nice work! :)

Sat, November 15th, 2014 11:44pm


I thought everything was deep, but you are entitled to your opinion, thank you for reading and commenting.

Sat, November 15th, 2014 6:47pm

Shahwar Akram

wow! You've got an amazing brain man! I liked the way you described it. Keep writting! xox

Sun, November 30th, 2014 10:33am


Thank you.

Mon, December 1st, 2014 4:30pm

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