Poem by: Corinne Smith
confusion, broken, shattered, hopeless
Submitted: February 02, 2007
Nowhere to hide
No place to confide
Just a hollow reflection
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Yes, short but very effective, Corinne. Powerful images. An excellent read. Well done. Annie L
Thank you so much Annie.
Yes but we all get words popping into our heads. That's why we write.
First verse has great rhythm, even though "twisted ropes" is perhaps the first thing you found that rhymed. There's probably a better line in there if you look for it?
Second verse loses the rhythm. Maybe that doesn't bother you. It bothers me a little so I improvise a possible alternative...
"Where to hide?
or something similar
Thank you so much for your input. I see where I could go with your suggestions but I think I like it just the way it is. Thanks again!
Well written. Liked the message. Good rhyming scheme.
Syllable count per line. Last verse.
very well wrtitten! i can so realate to that. good job!
very good says the point clear and simple
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