Before the Fall that Ended it All
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Poem by: Criss Sole
Smoke outside
Nice warm September evening
Just a reminder of a summer that passed
And the wanting to keep it
The memories remain
And pain me
Robbie looks into my eyes
And I can’t look away
On the bus ride home
To my left he sits in his car
But does not look over at me
He remains in my heart
While I remain on the bus
When I step through the door
Feeling far away from him
He becomes a memory
And as much as my heart loves him
My logic, or what remains
Tells me I love an illusion
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Started out cheery, but ended on a sad note. :( Sometimes we are in love with an illusion, other times it's ourselves telling us we're not good enough for that person. We won't find out until we take that next step, but when you wait too long, the opportunity is missed. I've waited too long before. It's always more comfortable to play it safe, but that's not how life plays.
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Very true. It was another good memory from years ago that I wrote about. Always pleasant to look back on how things were and smile. Thank you for your comment. It means a lot.
Very Sad Poem. Sometimes we are just "in Love with Love."
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Very true :) Thank you for reading and commenting.
Many times I sat gazing out the window waiting for a nothing connected to love to happen. I could feel it like the loss of life inside...me. I would think of the song, "I still haven't found what I am looking for." It was just wanting that somebody more than love. I was a shy, naive kid I suppose as I confess this in your comments. I still feel the sadness that your poem breathed meaning for me because your piece transported me back for a moment. Thinking. I like to share how another's writing can do this when it happens. I am naturally visual, and how my imagination sees is how I interpret the writing...or creation. I love fine art too. Thank you my friend of the pen for moving me inside. Your strength is you visually command feeling. Outstanding piece!
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Thank you so much. Your comment meant a lot to me.
Nicely written, I'm left with the feeling that I'm missing something(?). ... Thanks for the read.
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I wrote this before I became permanently disabled. I look back at my life now, and it is night and day. Thank you so much for stopping by and giving it a read.
I just saw this Cris! Believe it or not you are totally identifiable as the author of this piece, I recognize your persona! It's so strange to look back in time and literally be in awe over what we didn't know was going to happen yet, our naivety and also sometimes we give ourselves credit. Hey, we were stronger as it turned out than we could have guessed. I know you are my shero. I think at the end too you were kinda teasing yourself like, I could fall in love with a false idea of perfection, but I'm just not that foolish lol. Love you Cris!
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Aww thank you sweetheart. You have always given me so much support. I don't know where I would be without it. Sending you and your family lots of love as always.
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