The Jewel from The End of The World
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Book by: crowefoot
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Submitted: March 29, 2016
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I thought that maybe that jewel that Topsy was showing was fake and it was a prop it turns out! LOL! But Nordragon has the real jewel? And Topsy better not make fun of Silky. He, after all, saved her once from her tiger and she may need him to save her again I'll bet!I Also figured that guy in blackface was up to something and guess maybe he was. Another great descriptive period piece chapter, Crowfoot. Look forward to the next!
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Yes you guessed right. I'm glad you are enjoying it so far. Thanks so much for reading and commenting Nikki. I really appreciate it. I'll have another couple of chapters up soon which I hope you can check out. Thanks again!!!
Loved the party and all the descriptions of the dress and attitude of the people and period was awesome! Also love the name "Topsy Drinkwater." She may appear to be kind of a phony celebrity but she's more dangerous than her pet tigers and now she is showing off the jewel but I wonder if its real or a fake? Either way Silky better beware. Another great chapter, Crowfoot!
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Hi Nikki. Wow you look so different in your new picture. I almost didn't recognise you. Thanks so much for checking out another chapter. Yes, you guessed right. The jewel is a fake- very perceptive LOL. But there is loads more suprises to come. Thanks for reading.
Great job! I was wondering if you could read the first chapter of my book. I could really use a good writer's criticism and critiques. Thank you!
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No. Why would I bother when you haven't bothered reading and leaving a real comment on mine?
Nice twist! I can't wait to see where this goes. I like Topsy a lot and I hope she's an important character in the story to come. Thanks for the update :)
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Thanks so much for checking out another couple of chapters and for your corrections in the text. Glad you are enjoying it. And yes, Topsy stays at the center of the action throughout the rest of the story!
All the old adverts really set the mood and help the reader connect with the time period - great work! Some more brilliant humour here. Love it!
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Yes, I always like to put as much humour in as I can, this piece is mostly meant to be fun rather than dead serious..although still exciting hopefully. I'm glad you like the adverts. They are all real examples and show what a diferrent world it was in many ways. So glad you are enjoying the story. Thanks again for reading.
Sounds like an adventure! I hope Silky's up to the job, although he seems like a nice and competent guy.
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Yes, there's quite an adventure ahead...although it doesn't quite go the way expected. Thanks so much for reading.
Good start! I like the humorous moments especially :) The story seems intriguing and quite original. I will be reading on...
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Thank you so much for reading. i really appreciate it. I'm really glad you are enjoying the story.
Ha, I really liked the ad. It was definitely entertaining and what an interesting scene here- it was unique and like nothing I've read before. Good job.
-Dots...
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Thanks so much for reading. I'm glad you found it entertaining and, yes, I always aim to do something a bit different every time I am writing.
You have set the story up nicely, with three weird and dangerous places for the hero to visit, promising plenty of adventure and excitement. I can imagine this being made into a movie, with Benedict Cumberbatch as Silky, and Judy Dench as Mrs Baston-Sharp. Great stuff, Crowefoot!
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Thanks so much for reading. I don't know about a big budget movie. It's hard enough ed LOL. Thanks again
You have perfectly portrayed the world of the privileged gentleman in the 1930's, where cheating at a school cricket game is the ultimate atrocity! The story has good pace, and makes the reader eager to know what will happen next! I can't wait to read on...
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Yes. The story is really an affectionate piss-take of those old-fashioned adventure stories. The cricket-cheating is part of the joke. Cheating (and going to the wrong school) is enough for our hero to spot a wrong 'un. LOL. That's so much for reading and commenting. I really appreciate it and I'm glad you enjoyed it.
This is really good, Crowefoot.It is very filmic in the way Indiana Jones or Rider Haggard stories are. I may not have time to read all of it but should I not do so, good luck. You are on to a winner here.
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Chris
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Thanks for all you're encouragement. I didn't expect you would be able to read all of it. Your reading and commenting on these chapters alone is much appreciated. Thanks again.
This is a first class opening chapter, Crowefoot, setting the scene and painting the characters in a convincing manner and setting up an intruiging situation for the adventure. I'll go on now to chapter 2.
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Chris
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I'm so glad you liked the opening. I was really hoping this beginning, especially the add, was a good attention grabber. Thanks so much for reading and for your encouragement. It is much appreciated.
I love that you've started off with a newspaper wanted ad, I almost wish there was a picture in it's place! I could clearly visualize every moment, and I love the name's you've chosen for your character. Period pieces are certainly my favorite, and I look forward to more!
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Thanks!
Love the old advertisements! Pretty funny! And how he's imagining how he's going to explain to his friend the adventure their about to embark on was funny too! Now Silky has a lead on the mystery lady but he'd better be careful. Even though he only has seven hours he can get in a lot of trouble during that time and I bet he will!! Another awesome chapter, crowefoot! KMU!
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Yes there are so many (unintentionally) funny adverts from that period. I had trouble choosing just those ones- there were loads of others. I'm glad they made you laugh. I'm glad you are enjoying the story and I hope you continue to find it a fun read. Thanks so much for reading and commenting Nikki! I really appreciate it.
Wow! Silky's work is sure cut out for him. Three wild and weird places to go to defeat this unspeakable evil and to top it off he's in a race with Appleby and that weirdly creepy Nordragon.
This was a really creepy chapter and you set up the atmosphere and what's ahead perfectly. Great job! I'm off to the next chapter!
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Yes there's lots of wild weird stuff ahead...but possibly its not going to go the way they are expecting!!! But i won't give anymore away. I'm so glad you are enjoying the story and thanks so much for all your enthusiasm and support!!
Right off I loved the lady's ad! Especially at the end, "non-smoker, must love dogs!" And all the requirements. As Bradman said it'll draw all kinds and it did! Also love your descriptions from the decor of the barroom to the apparel of the ladies outside. A perfect period piece. I like "Silky." He seems to be the perfect gentleman-adventurer, who I feel tries to avoid danger but can't help how danger is drawn to him. But it's a mystery why this Howard wants to poison the lady? Hmmm. Which provides the opportunity for Silky to find out and put this Howard in his place and go off on another adventure. Awesome start, Crowefoot! I love everything about this story and look forward to the next chapter!! KMU!!
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Wow! I wasn't expecting you to respond so quickly Nikki. Thanks so much! Glad you are enjoying it so far and I hope the following chapters continue to be a fun read!
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