Longing
Who knows the shame of wanting pain?
Of dreaming things you can’t explain.
Of wanting what’s not yours to take.
Can’t control the longing.
Who knows the path that’s right to choose.
For fear that love you might just lose
Don’t take a walk in someone's shoes.
And don’t control the longing.
Who says that life should go one way?
It‘s different in the world today.
Break free. Speak what you want to say.
Don’t try to fight the longing.
Life holds you back, but what is worse?
A lie is different than a curse.
Let your heart speak. That is first.
And welcome in the longing.
Submitted: June 17, 2010
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Amazing poem! I like it
Fri, June 18th, 2010 9:20pm
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Thank u so much! :D
Fri, June 18th, 2010 6:02pm
Truly amazing! I can never write poetry xD I absolutly LOVE this.
Mon, June 21st, 2010 12:37am
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Aww thank u soo much!! Thats so sweet
Mon, June 21st, 2010 3:01am
Amazing. I cant believe you're only 15. Thats insane.Im 17. anyways... you have great style and amazing word choice. You give the image very well, and everything flows. you also alow me too feel the words, thats important. Keep working hard and let me know when you add more stuff. Ill be reading your novel also, as soon as i have a moment to enjoy it.
Wed, October 27th, 2010 4:57am
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Thank u tons for reading my work! Ur super sweet. :)
Tue, October 26th, 2010 11:07pm
Wow.
I almost cried...ok I'll admit ONE small rogue tear escaped my eyes lol, grrr!
Your words are so strong and so powerful in such a small poem, capturing the essence of the message. The message to not fight what is inevitable, and to let yourself be taken by that of which you cannot control.
Seriously? Who do you think you are coming in here and being so incredibly talented with words and emotions and being so frickin' good!
Btw, verse 3 was probably my favorite, as I sort of try to live my life by those words.
I have to words for you, AMAZING!
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Wow thank you so much!! Gosh this is more than I deserve. You make it sound so good. Im so happy you like it. I love getting reactions out of people. That's why I love writing! Thanks a ton for your lovely and sweet comments!!
Fri, November 5th, 2010 4:40pm
This poem is the definition of perfection. :)
Amazing.
xox
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Awwwwww.. Well I think YOU are the definition of perfection
Sun, July 3rd, 2011 6:38pm
Agreed. Complete perfection.
great work!
Wow i really like this!! the rhymes were perfect, they didnt seem forced. it was smooth and meaningful. i like this
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Thanks!
Sat, October 30th, 2010 5:40am