Love is, Confusing?
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Poem by: DarkShadow666
I had thought that I loved you
But I think I'm losing touch,
I have fallen for another
But I’m losing you fast,
I don’t know what do to
What to say
Think and feel,
I still have slight feelings for you
What I have done with them is a mystery
That I hope I don’t find out,
This person is better than anything
Even life itself,
Some people “catch my drift”
I hope you understand this,
Yes, pathetic,
But it’s not you, it’s me,
I don’t want to hurt you
So I’m stuck in a dark place,
He has humour, character and more
You have me, I think that’s what you want,
I don’t know what to do
I don't love you,
I'm sorry,
But I think he doesn't know,
And I don't know what he feels,
Then again,
Love is, Confusing?
Right?
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Hi there,
Your work is showing a great deal of confusion and frustration. Perhaps a way of refining your feelings would be to refine your work. Your thoughts appear fragmented, so why not place them in order, creating stanzas out of the piece you have submitted. Ponder thoughts and create a rhyming scheme - by dwelling on the thoughts constructively you may find that you bring clarity upon yourself so that you may action those thoughts in real life. When reading your work, an example of refinement that came to me (my own interpretation of course) was:-
'I thought I truly loved you,
but it seems we're losing touch.
My heart's held by another
you're now more like a brother.'
As I say, the above is just a thought as to how you can approach the problem - I used to find that writing my thoughts as a poem then refining it over and over was therapeutic and helped order my thoughts.
Good luck to you.
C
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Thank-you and I completely agree. I kinda didn't think about it as I was Slightly frustrated at myself for, obvious reasons shown in my poem. Again thanks! :)
i would die than hear this. it is something, i hear my love saying in my nightmares... ghosts don't scare me but such words do.. you know why coz we live miles apart and i havn't talked to her from half an year... well! nicely put, i agree with roberts. do the necessary you can be better :)
Author
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Thank-you! :D
Spur of the moment writing is just as beautiful as normal writing. I understand to an extent what it is you are writing about. You loved someone but not in the way they loved you and then you fell for another and found it difficult to be around your 'friend' without seeing it hurt him. Love is confusing and will always be so.
Sincerely,
Ice
Author
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Thank-you and what you said is almost exactly what I was trying to get at! :)
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