Watch Me As I Fall (One-Shot)

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I think I'm at the edge now, but I could be wrong.

~Watch Me As I Fall~


“I give up.” then the line went dead.
Her words hung on my head like a painful reminiscence.
It dug its way through my heart, leaving the ragged, gapping holes.
These words, more than a phrase, were enough to send my world crashing down.
My heart, in danger of shattering into tiny pieces of dusts, fluttered in my chest.
It felt inflated as it throbbed.
It bled as my mind pondered, as it swam in my blissful memory,
As a particular memory, embossed in my head, filled me.

It was her, my love, laying on the jade meadow, with her eyes closed.
Shivering as I bathed her body, underneath me, with kisses.
The sun, struggling to see the scene of affection, was being concealed by the clouds.
It loathed how it cannot soak us with its warmth.
My hungry hands ran through her curves as our bodies collided with intense passion.
“I love you,” she whispered in my ears.
Her soft lips, brushed against my neck, down to my bare chest, leaving a trail of ecstasy behind.
I pushed her head, gently away from my neck and leisurely kissed her neck.
“James,” she said. I lifted my head from her perfect breasts,
And stared at her unfathomable set of glistening gray eyes.
Through them, I can almost see myself.
And right there, on that moment, I wanted to placate myself to her.
I craved for her body, more and more as we locked our gazes.
Her cold fingers found mine and intertwined to it.
I wanted to hold her against my body, as tight as I could.
I wanted to feel her heartbeat, and warmth of her body.
However, most of all, I wanted to make her feel how much I longed for her.
Dejectedly, I broke the silence that consumed us, “Are you sure about this?”
She looked away, and thought of an answer.
For a second, I was terrified that she may not want this.
She may not crave me as much as I craved her.
For a second, I thought, this was all done.
I caught a glimpse of hesitation in her eyes, but it vanished as she smiled.
“You’re the only person I’d consider doing this with.” her cheeks stained pink.
I allowed myself to break free from boundaries, indulging every inch of her…

The delight of this memory sent a mix of glee and sorrow.
I felt my heart quiver violently inside me.
It was as if I could almost hear it breaking.
I closed my eyes, letting the similar scene, envelop my thoughts.

Her head fell back, as I slowly entered her.
We moved in rhythm with each other’s body and I felt myself swell inside her.
Our heavy breaths became music to my ears as the collisions grew faster and faster.
She moaned my name, beckoning me not to stop.
I know she can feel the pleasure, as much as I can.
We were both enjoying this, and the longer we go, the more of it we desired.
The sound of her voice moaning my name sent alluring chills into my back.
Wrapping her legs around my waist, she grasped my body, tightening our hold, deepening the penetration.
“James...” she gasped my name as I reached deeper and stroked her breasts with my hand.
I moaned her name, and she screamed mine…

I struggled to leave this memory of us together.
And I found myself in the solitude of my bed.
Our bed, it was.
Once again, memories of us, together in the tranquility of this room, flooded through.
Drowning me in painful memories.
Scampering out of this room, out of this memory,
On the edge, I found myself.
In my pocket, the letter she gave grew heavy.
It was as if made of stone, pulling me down.
Further through the havoc in my sanity.
“Just go on to what you, pretend is your life….”
From this note, immobile words screamed at me.
Before my eyes, as tears fell like rain, I saw our love.
Through the blur of tears, my eyes failed.
Through the agony of memories, my heart ceased.
To me, now, the verdict came clear.

I’m now here, failing.
Intention of fatality, flooded my thoughts.
As love’s wings failed, I crashed.
From this heights that I once loved, I took one last look.
Never looking down, a stride, I took
Then, before my eyes, I saw my life.
Then before me, I left my life.

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Submitted: June 15, 2008

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That was really sad. :( Overall I think the story was really well written. Nice job :)

Sun, June 15th, 2008 9:39pm


Awwwwwh, thank you so muchh.

Sun, June 15th, 2008 3:05pm


I have to agree with Angela. It was sad, but it was also beautiful in a way. I liked it :)

Sun, June 15th, 2008 9:55pm


*gets confused with two eye pictures* O_o...xD
Thaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaank you so muchhh.

Sun, June 15th, 2008 3:05pm


AWE!!! That was really heartwrenching. :( I agree with Angela though. Very well written. I can't believe thats your first short story. ^-^

Sun, June 15th, 2008 10:08pm


Glad you liked it. =] *group huggg* xD Well, cuz of that I'm starting another short storyyy. Weee. *stands up in victory* I'll try to finish it tonight.

Mon, June 16th, 2008 1:28pm


heh girly that's a really good story. The way you capture emotion in such a short time is really amazing.------Luv yaaa!!!!

Mon, June 16th, 2008 2:56pm


:d Haha, thanks. BTW, did you ask Madison why he's being lamee?

Mon, June 16th, 2008 1:30pm


nice....i love the transition of good to sad and how that worked....really well done keep up with short stories, i loved how the letter suddenly weighed heaps, ver intrigueing metaphor, and how you left a lot to the imagination of the reader giving us not overly what happened but the emotions within

Thu, June 19th, 2008 11:22pm


Thank you. I love reading comments like yours.

Thu, June 19th, 2008 4:36pm

the great commacancha

that was cool. i liked the end too.

Sun, June 22nd, 2008 12:39am


Thanks =] Glad you enjoyed it

Sat, June 21st, 2008 5:45pm

Evie Gray1638

Well done! Honestly the comments before this one described it to a tee. I've read a few stories on this site but not many are nearly as well written. Excellent talent shown in such a short piece.

Sun, June 22nd, 2008 8:32pm


Awhhh. Thank you so much. =]
Comments like yours makes me feel so happy.

Sun, June 22nd, 2008 2:15pm


omg i loved this it was so good. it was also very sad awesome i loved it :)

Wed, June 25th, 2008 4:05pm


Awh, thank you. =]

Wed, June 25th, 2008 10:27am


sad but well written i like how you capture emotions really well. =]

Wed, June 25th, 2008 6:33pm


Thank youu. :d

Wed, June 25th, 2008 12:00pm


this was heka well written. I

Thu, June 26th, 2008 5:13am


Thank you. =]

Wed, June 25th, 2008 10:31pm

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