Breathing Ice

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

Poem in Math.......again

The brisk cold air

reflects my heart

Lonely and frightful

Angry yet scared

Everyone turns from the frost

and the snow

But I welcome it

breath it in

People are tied up

with their petty problems

Why can't they see

people dieing like me?

While your in your warm beds

I'm lying in the snow

Letting it soak into my viens

Letting it conquer my heart

Whoever said, "Love conquers all."

was out of their mind

But Murphy's Law

"Everything that can go wrong will."

Was seeing the world as it is

Broken, tired, ignored, Dieing.


Submitted: December 18, 2008

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MajorShipper

Wow. I love it! It perfectly describes teh way some feel. Really really good. I also like the title.

Wed, December 24th, 2008 10:59pm

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Thanks! I really appreciate ur comment! U really don't know how much it means

Wed, December 24th, 2008 3:42pm

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DoctorWho24

Fantastic piece! And I can understand writing poems in math ;)

Sun, December 28th, 2008 2:42am

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Thanks so much! Yeah I find the only time I write during school is math class, bit of a habit now.

Sat, December 27th, 2008 8:07pm

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guff01

I think you do a good job subtly touching on the ignorance of other people. Your in the snow but they won't join you because they are afraid of getting cold and they are only thinking of themselves. When everything goes wrong that can go wrong they won't do anything to prevent that. They can't see you and your problems because their only concerned about their own.

Mon, January 5th, 2009 6:04pm

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Wow you've explained it better than I could to myself. Thanks for ur comments!

Mon, January 5th, 2009 1:23pm