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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Commercial Fiction  |  House: Booksie Classic

I am alone, yet more whole then ever.

I shuddered, meaninglessly I tried to wonder.

In a gasp I tried to fluster even the most distant ocean while I try to swim in it.
I feel thirsty for some light.
With all my mind breadth I overseer even the most distant flicker of the world.
The light of which blinds the eyes of my spirit and meanwhile the colors of it create the maddest egotism.
I weep, inside of me.
The apathy for the world it oscillates me on the oldest boat of the centuries.
I drape my self, run after an exorcism ritual that I gift to the world.
I wish to be alone.
I try to sneer my own destiny. I am again with my creator, and I feel whole, whole inside the triumph temple of mine.
I have achieved to remain alone with my creator .
I am alone, yet more whole then ever.

Submitted: October 14, 2009

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Wow, this was nice and whole, and lots and lots of good ideas!

Fri, October 16th, 2009 9:13am


thx, so much i really appriciate your comments!

Fri, October 16th, 2009 3:01am


very detailed and vivid. great ideas!! i like it

Sun, October 25th, 2009 7:19pm

translingual writer 79

This was nice. I liked your descriptions. I'm giving you an 'I like it' vote.

Mon, November 2nd, 2009 1:31pm


thx a lot. It is very important to me your opinion, it inspires me to write a lot better.
thx denada

Tue, November 3rd, 2009 2:04am

Graeme Montrose

Wonderful piece, i loved your descriptions, it was very alive!

Thu, November 12th, 2009 3:30pm


thanks so much!

Thu, November 12th, 2009 8:24am

Mistress of Word Play

I loved this piece of self examination which you posted here. When I feel alone as you do I seek the quiet confines of nature and then as you do I find the real reason I am her. There comes a feeling as you so beautifully penned of being whole. If there is too much noise you cannot hear what He has to say. He says I love you and all that is here will pass as day does to night. Lovely you see how philosophical you make me with your words. A joy to read. Susan :)

Tue, November 24th, 2009 1:46pm


thanks Susan!
you have putted everything in such a nice way!
thx denada

Tue, November 24th, 2009 8:45am


Saludos cordiales.

Son maravillosas las metáforas que empleas.

Erick Bojorque

Tue, May 3rd, 2011 12:20am


Erick....tus palabras son como una brisa dulce que fluye lejos en los ríos de mi corazón .. trato de nadar en ello bebido en el deseo ... bebido en el misterio desconocido que sólo usted puede ser capaz de regalar ...

Tue, May 3rd, 2011 3:03am

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