Bloody Pain

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Horror  |  House: Booksie Classic

I thought it would never end...

The string is sawing through my lips,
Rubbing on this awful bliss
Creeping down my dying cells
Hoping never to reach hell
 
Cold is slipping down my breast,
Revelling in the broken test
Pouring down my blackened thighs,
Wishing there was a way to die.
 
Blood peeps from an angry wound,
Sliding upon my skin so smooth
Slowly slipping, loosing touch.
Weeping away my silent lust.
 
 
 


Submitted: June 01, 2010

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HelloKittyFucksTheMainstream

I Do Love It, Old Friend, Much Prefered To Some Of The Other - More Novice - Work On This Site. I Hope Your Light Shines Brightly.

Tue, June 1st, 2010 8:59am

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Your commented is much appreciated, dearest one. And indeed it does, as, I hope, does yours.

Tue, June 1st, 2010 2:08am

Angel of Death

WOW! This is lovely and very well written! Love your pen name by the way, good job :D

Tue, June 1st, 2010 9:38am

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Thank you, i rather like yours too :L

Tue, June 1st, 2010 2:59am

Truth Sayer

I love that poem!!!

Tue, June 1st, 2010 10:25am

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Thank you!

Tue, June 1st, 2010 6:53pm

FlawedByDesign

Liked it :)

"Blood peeps from an angry wound,
Sliding upon my skin so smooth"

We bleed to feel alive yet the blood "sliding upon" as opposed to down, turns the world upside down...like this a lot.

Well written.

Tue, June 1st, 2010 11:44am

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Thank-You, I appreciate your feed-back

Tue, June 1st, 2010 6:53pm

GabbieMarie

Beautiful!!! ^-^

Tue, June 1st, 2010 11:51am

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Thanks!

Tue, June 1st, 2010 6:51pm

innocentblushes

It's great! You describle everything so diffrently to most people so it's not just blood it's 'smooth' you take it to a whole new level congrads i look forward to reading more of your work :)

Tue, June 1st, 2010 3:08pm

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Thank-You

Tue, June 1st, 2010 6:51pm

the dead poet

well thats the moment,seem u captsure it well,

Wed, June 2nd, 2010 10:08am

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Thanks

Wed, June 2nd, 2010 8:57pm

Drumergirl33

That was very good. please check out my 1st chapter to Isle of Spilled Blood.

Wed, June 2nd, 2010 7:50pm

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Thank-You, if you want me to read something, write it on my page.

Wed, June 2nd, 2010 8:57pm

MysteryGirlRobyyn

Thats amazing...

Thu, June 3rd, 2010 6:56am

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Thank You

Thu, June 3rd, 2010 12:37am

Chloe the guitar girl

Wow, another amazing poem, Great description, really gives you a mental picture. Your poems are really filled with your emotion and thats what makes them great.
-Chloe-

Sat, June 5th, 2010 5:15am

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Thanks again

Sat, June 5th, 2010 4:22am

Sierra MacKenzie

So very dark...I liked it.

Thu, June 10th, 2010 11:33pm

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Thanks

Fri, June 11th, 2010 3:59am

Vaine

Very dark, gave me chills. A powerful poem and well written. I loved it.

Sun, June 13th, 2010 12:50pm

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Thanks

Mon, June 14th, 2010 2:48am

Flyleafmusic

Thats amazing, i loved it , your a really good poet.
~Destiny

Thu, July 22nd, 2010 12:56pm

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Thanks

Fri, July 23rd, 2010 3:25am

Snapdragon123

You are really good and I know I keep saying this but it is very dark. The lostness and well depression was portrayed very well in the poems.
-Snap.XD

Fri, July 23rd, 2010 8:03am

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Thanks

Fri, July 23rd, 2010 3:26am

Kritika

:o

Wow! Just wow!!''It was depressing (no pun intended)

but lovely.......=)

Sat, July 24th, 2010 8:25am

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Thanks

Sun, August 1st, 2010 2:21am

Khano

Wow. Ur really good.

Thu, August 5th, 2010 5:18am

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Thanks

Fri, August 13th, 2010 3:33am

Knife

So gory, I loved it

Fri, August 6th, 2010 1:51pm

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thanks

Fri, August 13th, 2010 3:34am

SilentEyes

I had to read it three times.
Love it when a poem makes me do that.

Really wonderful flow.
Probably one of the best poems I've read on booksie.

Sat, September 4th, 2010 5:10pm

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Thanks a lot

Fri, October 29th, 2010 2:13am

l i l y

Wow, I Really Like It :)

Tue, November 2nd, 2010 2:23pm

DeLala

Every word to every sentence was/is captivating.

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