Will You Kill Me?...

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Horror  |  House: Booksie Classic

This was inspired by the 'Are We Friends Or Are We Not?' poem i once got from a friend...
Dunno why i took it from the view of a mother though 0_0

Will you kill me or will you not?

You told me once but I forgot...

Come to my house in the dead of night

Give my kids an awful fright

Burn the house right down to ashes

Let my husband die from wounds and bashes

Call the ambulance a bit too late

Let me burn with strong anger and endless hate

I'll come after you to the ends of the earth

And make sure you mother regrets your birth

Will you kill me or will you not?

I'll burn you, drown you, and let you rot...


Submitted: November 22, 2009

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august138

wow, i like this poem! (not that i'm a sadist =])
it rhymes and the repeat of the 'will you kill me or will you not' kinds of emphasizes it.
sorry, not really good in commenting in poems in those kind of literature way.
anyway, just wondering what does this poem got to do with your friend? hmm, you said were inspired...
okay, never mind. ignore that.
just really like the way the words rhyme and brings the whole poem together! :D

Sun, November 22nd, 2009 1:58pm

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haha thanks! nah it's good you like it, and yh lots of ppl find they're strangely attracted to sadistic poems 0_0 that's why i write them lol.
haven't you heard the 'are we friends or are we not poem?' maybe google it or something.
well just thanks for reading :)

Mon, November 23rd, 2009 12:31am

FF7Yuffie

Cooly and slightly creepy poem! I like it.

Sun, November 22nd, 2009 3:04pm

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i know it is a bit creepy right...
glad you liked it, i think i wrote it when i was terribly angry lol, rage is a scary thing eh

Mon, November 23rd, 2009 12:32am

Gagan

creepy and very interesting...well it's a great start...may you come with something like this more...

Sun, November 22nd, 2009 4:01pm

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thanks for the support, it's muchly appreaciated :D
i did just come up with another poem 'do you believe in monsters?...' mind reading it?

Mon, November 23rd, 2009 12:34am

xBlackInkx

Flows very well, the concept is very interesting, and the language you used was good... All in all, an excellent poem :)

Mon, November 23rd, 2009 5:25am

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nice to have some advice on this, it makes me feel better about it
thanks

Mon, November 23rd, 2009 12:34am

ninjaNIGHT

Jana.

Cool poem.

Thanks for throwing your Lemon Ice Tea on me today :D

I will plan revenge MWAHAHAHAHA!
:P

Demi

Mon, November 23rd, 2009 8:02am

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hehe thanks demi, your awesomeness continues man :P
i await your evil plot~

Mon, November 23rd, 2009 12:35am

Behold

I like it, yea. Don't know what to say lol.
I personally would have left out "strong anger" and "wounds" and got rid of the ands, to make it flow better, they kind of lengthen it unnecessarily, but hey, don't listen to me lol.
Giving it an "I LIKE IT" !!!!

Mon, November 23rd, 2009 9:33am

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haha nice to hear. i think it would have been better with out the extras, too, but i wrote that one ages ago, just thought i would put it in anyway.

Tue, November 24th, 2009 12:05am

bimbobunny

wow the flow in this is fabulous and its really dark.

Thu, November 26th, 2009 8:22pm

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thanks lol
i quite liked the rhymes myself :P

Thu, November 26th, 2009 10:52pm

Jesyka

Dark!!!
I love it!!!
Reminds me of like a really creepy nursery rhyme or something.

Fri, November 27th, 2009 12:13pm

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ahaha thanks. yeah it was based on a real poem which in fact is a sweet one full of love and whatnot.
nice to you you like it :)

Fri, November 27th, 2009 6:41pm

MissGC

Nice!!! dark,
to you response to Jeskyas comment, all poems are real! this one rocked!

Mon, November 30th, 2009 8:04am

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oh really, all real? that's kool, if you know what i mean
thanks!

Mon, November 30th, 2009 10:33pm

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